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Published: 2008-01-29 19:55:31 +0000 UTC; Views: 3223; Favourites: 35; Downloads: 58
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Ash to ash: page 1: Once Upon a Time..._________________________________________
Basically an introductory page, for settings and characters.
Its is still very raw and does look raw, but I have no time, I'm afaried, to finish in properly, I am already very late in my schedual for the book pages and character concepts too.
I still don't have a way worked out for coloring this thing. Will take me more time... at least I will learn a lot through doing it
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Ash II ash belongs to =MoonLightSpectre
Second page coming soon...
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Comments: 21
eto to, chto ty delaesh' dlja insy? ofigitel'no!
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нууу примерно, эта страница будет забракована, смотри новые %)
А вообще - давно не виделись
И - спасибо за подздравлениe, было оч приятно^^
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убило "латентный дракон" xD xD xD
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One thing I gotta say is beautifully colored. wow. I like the style of your text bubbles. It gives it an old worldy/ fantasy feel. However (dun dun dun) be careful with your balloon placement. Its not horrible by anymeans juust a bit off to have to take a double read through to make sure I read right. One way to help is to only have one tail from your bubble to the character if all the bubbles are coming from him. Make sence? all in all great job especially for someone who doesnt draw comics.
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Wow, very very nice! I was confused by the order of the text bubbles I must say, but that may be because it's late.
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Looks like a good story, and the look is very fine!
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It looks awsome 
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The art is as always nice, but I don't really understand in which order you are supposed to read the panels. And in which order you read the text-bubbles.
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from left to right, and then from top to bottom.
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Yes, so I figured
I still can't actually figure out if the small panels to the right are supposed to be read between or after the two big panels.
I am in no way a master of comics but I hope the criticism helps. It could be nice for a change too ;D
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Ohh I love the palette. And the speech bubbles! Awesome.
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I faved it before I even red it. I'm that excited about the Ash || Ash project. And it was worth the fav can't wait for the next and I like the coloring.
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lovely!!!
I like mostly the bg (since I can't do a single one that can be called a good bg... lol)
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Holy crap I'm excited you're doing this. x3 Really great expressions. It takes so much time to make a manga with each pane being its own piece of art. I can't wait to read more.
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Looks great to me :]
And if you need critics, then I say you need to work a little bit with background when you have time 
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