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zoulapaki [2009-11-03 23:47:00 +0000 UTC]

perfect as always......

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samax [2009-11-03 23:30:57 +0000 UTC]

great art and storytelling. like i said before, you pictures are really telling the story!

i think the word balloon in the last panel is too high, though... i read it before i looked at the second to last panel. if it could be lower, i think it would not break the flow of the page so much.

this is only a minor thing, though. i think the work here is very very strong, overall!

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TheCH [2009-11-03 23:18:17 +0000 UTC]

fu//en kids school sucks.

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gliovampire [2009-11-03 17:18:53 +0000 UTC]

Unfortunately I cannot advice you on a technical point of view the way SlideStudios did. I am not drawing, so I cannot give technical comments. Remember, however, that the comic will be read by many people and the majority knows as much about technique as I do. So just an advice of a reader: I love it! I read the critique about the eyes,I cannot object to it as it comes from an illustrator and I am not one. But honestly it did not disturb me, never mind how many times I checked it. You may correct it but to a mere reader, the illustrations give the right impression.
I don't write this to flatter you;if there were something I did not like I would tell you. And why on earth would I flatter you? Better to hear a criticism by a friend than by an editor. So if you think it is important do the changes suggested by the artists but to the non-illustrator it is not so obvious. Hope it helped.

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Walter-Ostlie [2009-11-03 13:48:23 +0000 UTC]

Nice stuff. I like how you did the last panel. I also like the girl's profile in the third panel.

But I think the eye lines are off in the third panel. The boy is looking to high and the girl looks like she is staring straight. Also this page doesn't have the grays that the last page had. Are you going to add that later?

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