Comments: 39
purcell232 [2010-10-26 00:41:21 +0000 UTC]
I like the poem, being a musician I think the street scenery was very descriptive and the declamation worked well with the text layout.
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Omni-Flow [2010-09-03 22:40:43 +0000 UTC]
your analogies are on fire, people who say that the written word is dead obviously have been sheltered or brain dead. this piece is raw.
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oldest-boy In reply to Omni-Flow [2010-10-09 23:07:53 +0000 UTC]
word; glad you could dig it.
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oldest-boy In reply to AlecBell [2010-07-30 20:50:11 +0000 UTC]
thanks for reading.
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AlecBell In reply to oldest-boy [2010-07-30 23:10:41 +0000 UTC]
Certainly my pleasure!
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1Walkingblind [2010-05-31 01:17:56 +0000 UTC]
The description in this poem is powerfully raw and edgy. The reader gets slightly roughed up by it. This piece defiantly comes from a person who knows what he is doing. Great job
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ShadowedAcolyte [2010-03-07 09:02:42 +0000 UTC]
A solid piece--great opening image, although the strength of the work dwindles from there until the "pawn shop" image, and all but the very last bit of the end is awesome.
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Self-Intoxication [2010-02-06 04:59:23 +0000 UTC]
dun nuh nuh nuh nuh nuh nuh nuh BATMAN
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wearecommunities [2009-12-19 17:19:27 +0000 UTC]
as a dirty musician
i appreciate this very much.
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offbyzero [2009-11-21 19:31:11 +0000 UTC]
I like how you said things in a new way so it gave this entire mood to the poem.
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Big-Sway [2009-11-10 01:17:37 +0000 UTC]
That is one delicious piece o poetry.
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oldest-boy In reply to Big-Sway [2009-11-15 21:02:08 +0000 UTC]
thanks big swayzee
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pseudometry [2009-11-09 06:55:15 +0000 UTC]
This is descriptive, rhythmic poetry bliss: the images and cadence are to be savoured.
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PlatoPushpin [2009-11-07 19:20:50 +0000 UTC]
I love the first few lines...
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YouInventedMe [2009-11-05 01:38:33 +0000 UTC]
rocks and rolls
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spoems [2009-11-03 17:23:12 +0000 UTC]
love the last two stanzas - esp
"guitar strings
tired flailing"
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oldest-boy In reply to spoems [2009-11-08 18:01:25 +0000 UTC]
thanks mang.
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oldest-boy In reply to Garnet-43 [2009-11-08 18:04:29 +0000 UTC]
thanks Carla! you are often
in my
thoughts.
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nunheh [2009-11-03 08:34:08 +0000 UTC]
Ummm Ummm. Catch me a big old catfish, gobble him up. Although I don't fish, and oddly, like myself, they are bottom feeders.
Interesting images, as always.
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