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Scharle — Forest Walk
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Published: 2019-01-14 21:11:01 +0000 UTC; Views: 656; Favourites: 137; Downloads: 0
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Critique welcome
Based on all the helpful critique I received, I tried to improve the piece and resubmitted it:
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wow, that is a magical mystical piece. so much blue. i see 4 kids and the forest world looks beautiful if a bit dangerous. i could imagine these 4 kids exploring the forest watching out for the bears and other dangerous traps. the rain droplets are lovely as is the watery grass or is it a river. this reminds me of the new show stranger things but this is a more fantasy based picture. this has to be pic of the hour. very lovely art and one that is missing from the site and i'm glad you don't do fetish stuff. you create fantasy worlds by pen or paint. i was a kid when i explored the forests in woodhaven lakes. still though, this is so magical. when i think of the forest, i think of a certain fantasy world. wonderful piece. e.deviantart.net/emoticons/s/s… " width="15" height="15" alt="
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Hello, I´m from a.deviantart.net/avatars/p/r/p… " alt=" " title="ProjectComment" />! ^_^
I haven´t given out many critiques yet, so I hope it´s not sounding off.
First I want to start with the vision.
I really like the idea of a rainy forest with such unusual but interesting perspective! It makes me feel to be part of the scenery, watching kids or a family which seems to got lost and who searches a way out. It is amazing how the combination of rain and perspective can produce such dramatic overall look. e.deviantart.net/emoticons/b/b… " width="15" height="15" alt="
Now to the technique and overall look.
The amount of water, running to the front of the image really strengthens the dynamic and dramatic here and I think you did a great job on the water perspective, too. I think water is really difficult to draw, but you did good to make it look to be flooding the grassland without looking like a sea. I only think that one some parts it looks like waves or waterfall, where the strokes are too large and wavy. Though I think your intention was to make the ground have a less flat looking. e.deviantart.net/emoticons/s/s… " width="15" height="15" alt="
I love how you used a minimalistic color pallett of blue, green and white and how you blurred the trees on their tops and the more they are farer away. This and the soft sun make it look like a misty weather which fits perfectly to the rain.
It´s also very interesting to see the humans as shadows, caused of the dark. The one person holding a branch, makes me feel even more they got lost somehow.^^
There are only a few things to mention. I recognized that the combination of sharp and blurred parts are not balanced enough on some parts. (That´s what I have to learn myself, too. ^^") The characters should be a bit blurred I guess, though I know they are the focus. But the ground they are standing on and the tress next to them are more blurred like them, which is a bit confusing to look at.
Same with the piece of water on the left side of the hill they are standing on. This and the thing I mentioned with the water on the front were the only things I have to critique.
All in one, this is a really awesome piece with an unusal scenery and interestic perspective! Keep it up! e.deviantart.net/emoticons/b/b… " width="15" height="15" alt="
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Hello Lacrima,
although you are not experienced in commenting I think you did it very well and respectful and your advices are very helpful and specific. I tried to improve the piece as good as I could. I'm not completely satisfied with the water yet but I tried to improve the blurriness in the background.
Thank you for taking time to comment. It really always makes me really happy and I feel very honoured that someones analyzes a piece I did
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Ich habe jetzt erst gemerkt, dass du auch Deutsch bist! XD
Mich freut es wahnsinnig, dass dir meine Kritik geholfen hat.
Besonders auf Englisch fällt es mir schwer die richtigen Worte zu finden.
Ich habe dein überarbeitetes Bild gesehen und finde toll wie schnell du die Vorschläge verschiedener Leute umgesetzt hast!
Ich bin schon auf deine nächsten Werke gespannt!
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Hey, ja ich stimme dir zu, mir fällt es auch schwer auf Englisch eine Kritik zu schreiben aber ich hatte trotz der Sprachhürde keine Schwierigkeiten zu verstehen, was du meintest
Immer wenn ich die Kritiken zum Bild lese, fallen mir plötzlich auch die Dinge auf, die erwähnt werden und ich kann es dann nicht abwarten, Korrekturen am Bild vorzunehmen
Vielen lieben Dank
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Das beruhigt mich!
So geht es mir auch. Manchmal schaffe ich aus Ebenen-Gründen nicht die Fehler auszubessern.
Aber es ist immer gut wenn mans kann. ^_^
Nichts zu Danken!❤
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Ja manchmal ist es schwer die Fehler auszubessern wenn man Ebenen gemerged hat. Ich male immer auf sehr vielen Ebenen und lasse sie so, aber da verliert man oft die Übersicht
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Stunning artwork!! I personally think that this art is amazing in almost every way!! The misty waterfall under the exploring people's feet is very on point! It gives the cold chills but probably the best part of this artwork!!
Alright, rooms for improvement time! I think that the artwork would look better or just make more sense if the light in the sky between the trees is slightly dimmer than now. With that much of a bright light, the water reflection should be brighter than now, even with the fog. Also, the grass in the fog just doesn't seem very realistic, it just seem a little plain. I know i might be picky here, but i just think that a bit more work on the details would make this art even better.
That's all i have to say for this amazing artwork, keep up the great job!!
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Thank you for the nice and helpful comment. Your feedback was actually quite helpful and I tried to dimm the light in the edited version. I'm still not completely satisfied with the grass in my second version but let's see if I will get back to the painting once more
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i saw ur new one! It looks so much better!! Glad to help!
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This piece is absolutely stunning! The blue and green colors compliment eachother very nicely! The perspective is great and I love how you drew the light up in the trees! I agree that’s the streams are drawn a little too detailed, they almost look like webs (very pretty webs though) I think you can fix this by drawing fewer streams that are wider. If you draw them transparent so you can see what’s behind them they’ll still look like run off from the rain and not like a water fall (which I’m guessing is what you were trying to avoid). The blades of grass in the back ground should be shorter to help with the perspective (unless the grass in the back is supposed to be taller)
I don’t know what sort of tone you’re trying to set here but I think blurring out the kids a tiny bit will add a sense of mysterious-ness to the image.
Great work! My favorite thing about this is that it definitely tells a story that I’d love to exploree.deviantart.net/emoticons/s/s… " width="15" height="15" alt="
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I want to thank you again for your nice and kind comment
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You’re welcome! You’re an amazing artist! I can’t even imagine how much better you’ll get
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Beautiful work the colors are soothing and calm, and the perspective is well done.
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thank you so much it means a lot to me you like it!!
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very interesting use of white lines to emphasise the rain.
Oddly enough reminiscent to a Chinese film in a rain/battle scene.
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ty very much . Haha that's a cool association
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This is a good piece. Has a really great feeling of depth. Just the right amount of detail to give it a feeling without overly defining or focusing on a single spot.
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Very nicely done!! I too love the blue-greens and the haze off in the distance. To me it makes me think I would not want to be out there at dust in the haze.. kind of a spooky vibe.. Kudos!!
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Thank you very much. Yes it's a little spooky. I guess it's the blueish colors that emphazise that. Actually I never intent making my paintings appear spooky but they always turn out a bit more darker. But it's ok for me
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You are very welcome!! what ever it is, keep it up.
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This is so beautiful!!!! I wish I could draw like you do!!!
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You can draw like this too I'm sure
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Thank you so much. And thanks agian for your feature
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Welcome, thanks for your fave and watch!
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Thank you for your comment. I appreciate it
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Ooh, nice. This makes a great story that can be told. 
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Thank you so much. It's what I really hope!!!
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I adore the composition and the colors as well. The mood it gives off is something between eerie and awe. The dripping water seems a bit stiff and uniform, but that would be my one and only critique. I really like it!
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Thank you so much for your comment. As you maybe already have noticed I tried to improve the water by adding some sprinkles
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The composition and mood in this is so impressive, I can practically hear the splashing rain and river. Great work!!
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Thanks very much. It means a lot to me that you like it
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