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selune — I regret
Published: 2003-08-19 12:15:28 +0000 UTC; Views: 525; Favourites: 1; Downloads: 47
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Description Sorry for dreaming too far away,
Sorry for going too often astray,
Sorry for running blind into danger,
Sorry for treating you worse than a stranger,
Sorry for thoughts that I sought to divide,
Sorry for loving I could not provide,
Sorry for stars that I could not create,
Sorry for hints that I failed to relate,
Sorry for laughing at your point of view,
Sorry for thinking I was better than you.
Sorry for faith that I could not maintain,
For your ideals that vanished in pain...
But now, no matter how I regret,
Sorry, my dear, I can't make you forget -
It's too late.
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Comments: 14

d-lo [2003-09-23 16:46:17 +0000 UTC]

Usually I'm not for repetition either, but if one call pull it off in a non-forced way (like you did), I can appreciate it. I like the ending; it's very abrupt and powerful. Nice job.

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halfway2nowhere [2003-09-13 09:36:01 +0000 UTC]

This poem is excellently written, i love the repetition it really works well!

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halfway2nowhere [2003-09-13 09:33:56 +0000 UTC]

This is excellent the repetition does work really well, this poem really does pump through with emotion, nice work!

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chamunan [2003-09-10 17:17:24 +0000 UTC]

That's very touching! I hope the person forgave you.

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raphi-kun [2003-08-29 12:34:47 +0000 UTC]

it's not too late...it's too wonderful...such a great piece of art!!! Btw, glad you're back

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zaknafein [2003-08-26 17:47:26 +0000 UTC]

Wonderful... you have such word mastery...
your ideals that vanished in pain...
Those three dots hurt. I love that.

Here goes another fav...

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dakweenoh3arts [2003-08-21 12:17:15 +0000 UTC]

i love the flow of this poem. its great, the last four lines are perfect. the honesty that seeps thru i gripping... sometimes rhyme can take away the emotion but its kept it there. nice work mate

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haplo [2003-08-21 05:09:38 +0000 UTC]

I like it..

my respect my liege

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spyker [2003-08-20 06:42:14 +0000 UTC]

"Im Sorry" oh, how I long to hear those words from ther person who hurt me. I must admire your character for wanting to say sorry to a person you hurt. It's wonderful in aiding the healing process. Hope the person got it.

Beautiful emphasis on feeling sorry.

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dunkler-adlig [2003-08-19 16:58:46 +0000 UTC]

that's a good use of repitition, i think. it sets a certain "single-minded" frame of mind... i also like the use of the couplets, it also makes the poem "pulse"... and not make it sound sing-songy in the process. nicely done!!

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dreary-sinner [2003-08-19 13:31:57 +0000 UTC]

Oh it would be interesting to hear the concerned persons answer on this... I can only agree with tagge, not many people would be able to say what you do... My respect!

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tagge [2003-08-19 12:28:10 +0000 UTC]

Nice, I like the pretense. You don't see a lot of people to appologetic when they hurt someone anymore, let alone to this degree.

I like the style, reminds me of a couple I did (hopefully I don't sound conceeted saying that).

Peace,
-T.

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darkcrescendo [2003-08-19 12:26:33 +0000 UTC]

Quite well written, although the flow of the last four lines seems somewhat disjointed.

I agree that the structure of this poem does help to accentuate the emotional content.
All in all, I like this poem.

Benedictions!

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icklefluffywolfy [2003-08-19 12:18:50 +0000 UTC]

Well, mostly I'm not fond of repition in poetry... but here it really helps reinforce the emotional strength of the words! Most impressive.

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