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HelloLovelies [2014-07-30 21:29:17 +0000 UTC]
This is my second time reading this, and all of the crazed thoughts that ran through my head the first time returned when i read the end of this chapter:
Shit, Scot just knocked Derek out . . . that twink, needs to learn how to dodge . . . oh-ho, those two are so dead. God, cant wait to read the next one . . . shit, shit, shit, Eric what shall you do? And Scot . . . mmmm, need to read the next one.
Well, besides that, I am in love with this story, and all of your other work. Heh, heh ^^
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siyeh75 In reply to HelloLovelies [2014-07-31 00:29:35 +0000 UTC]
Those two are so dead . . . Oh, yes, they are!
Thank you so much for the comment.
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HelloLovelies In reply to siyeh75 [2014-07-31 00:59:30 +0000 UTC]
You're very welcome. I enjoy reading your work.
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meryvamp [2012-09-03 06:37:57 +0000 UTC]
Wow, I loved the idea of Derek and Eric messing around purposefully right in front of Scott. It was not only hot but it added a lot of tension between your characters.
Okay, and I followed everything until the very, very end. Derek and Eric obviously know that Scot has been sarcastic in his tone up until that point, so why do they just abruptly let him go? And wouldn't Eric know when his own boyfriend was being deceitful? I mean, shouldn't they have been able to tell he was about to strike out at them? Up until that point, everything in Scott's behavior indicates that he is extremely angry and he even threatens both of them, so why in the world would they just easily let him go? I guess I just needed a better transition here, or perhaps, Scott is really good at deceiving people. Perhaps, he actually uses charm. Maybe you were going for that, but I just didn't get it?
Anyway, that first opening scene was.. *Oh, no, I've slobbered on myself*
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siyeh75 In reply to meryvamp [2012-09-04 16:01:57 +0000 UTC]
I am glad you enjoyed that first part, at least.
You make a good point. I am not very good at developing my characters. I explain it a bit in the next part ('Jekyll and Hyde') but that is maybe too late.
Thank you for the comment!
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meryvamp In reply to siyeh75 [2012-09-11 20:26:38 +0000 UTC]
No, er, well, maybe I didn't word my question correctly. I think you gave enough hints into Scot's character and showed his "Jekyll and Hyde" personality, but if that is his character, then why did Derek and Eric just easily release him? If Scott is prone to snapping at any second, and just a second ago he had a sarcastic tone, then why do they release him? Wouldn't they be afraid of him? I guess the fact that Derek noticed he was being sarcastic, but then immediately released him is what confused me.
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c-balls [2011-09-06 02:10:53 +0000 UTC]
Yes! I'd been hoping ...
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c-balls In reply to siyeh75 [2011-09-06 14:10:01 +0000 UTC]
Patience?! As if!
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Eun-su [2011-09-05 06:25:34 +0000 UTC]
wohoho, there will be more! Its just awesome, your ideas are fresh :3
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cobramer [2011-09-05 06:24:39 +0000 UTC]
What to say... Incredible!
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CandyCaves [2011-09-05 01:32:14 +0000 UTC]
That's pretty HOT!!!!!
Is there gonna be another part??
total drool.. and I'm a girl!!
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