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indoorfireworksxx [2010-12-04 20:02:30 +0000 UTC]
The price and bird imagery works so well, this is really beautiful.
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PoisonLikeYourOwn [2010-11-08 19:42:36 +0000 UTC]
I absolutely adore the structure of this, the choppy places where the lines end sometimes doesn't really work, but here it's wonderful.
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archelyxs [2010-11-06 20:34:55 +0000 UTC]
I love the way your words rise and fall like shattered waves.
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prettyflour [2010-11-06 14:25:04 +0000 UTC]
love the last line!
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WanderingHere [2010-11-06 02:43:59 +0000 UTC]
this is brilliant. it's so quirky and eloquent.
particularly love the last two stanzas.
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et141311 [2010-11-06 01:09:19 +0000 UTC]
Wow. Very well done. I really like this piece, from start to finish.
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