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Edit: [click here for next page]Yay! Page 2 is up! And yay for Americano spelling!
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So now you get to see the lady that killed Ayumi's family.
Oh, and look out! She's spotted you, Ayumi! Oh noes! You're officially a witness now!
What happens next? Does she kill Ayumi? or maybe Ayumi takes off into the air, Matrix style! Who knows! Find out next time... on Dragon ball Z!
err... I mean on my comic... >_>
Stuff I've said in the previous pages:
This is actually a back story for one of my characters so it might be a little confusing. Basically, the story focuses around Ayumi who has purple hair. She was originally a side character but I've decided to centre the story around hers to make the manga a lot shorter. Her story started off as just 4 pages but I've decided to elaborate on it a bit to share it with everyone who's reading it now.
Technique:
Actual comic done on paper with screentones digitally inserted. The "dots" were the only screentones I used. blood effects, xoom lines and whatnot were done manually, freehand or with a ruler.
The colour image was a sketch that I photoshopped into colour. I dunno if that makes it digital art, but the digital art section seems to be for stuff done with a tablet so I might have to re-think the categories I put all my art in.
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Comments: 56
That head-shot in the last panel is great
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The figures are fairly well drawn, and the composition is decent. But, I have to comment on the last two panels. There's no continuity! At first, I thought you neant to have a scene change, but you say she's the one who killed all those people just then. If she is the killer, then shouldn't she have some blood on her too? The panels don't link.
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You know... you're the first person who's spotted that. 
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''What happens next? Does she kill Ayumi? or maybe Ayumi takes off into the air, Matrix style! Who knows! Find out next time... on Dragon ball Z!
err... I mean on my comic... >_>''
Haha, I love how you added dragon ball Z. I've finally un-lazyfied myself to read this comic o.o
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Those bits in Dragon Ball Z used to just drive me nuts. It's like we sit through 20 minutes of Goku charging up the spirit bomb and then when he's finally about to attack... well, you get the point.
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Yup xD; I used to watch DBZ o.o And to be honest, I was ashamed of watching it because I was a girl. I must've been eight, nine? XD; I remember paying my sister a WHOLE dollar bill just so she can leave my room for me to watch tv. A dollar bill is a lot for an eight year old @__@~ It was a lot for even an 11 year old...
heehee, but did I love that show. I miss it @_@ It doesn't play here, in Canada..as far as I know.
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Yeah, it stopped airing over here quite a while ago as well.
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Well, Kill Bill played a big part in influencing this scene. xD
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Very nice: my only suggestion would be to carefully check it and clean any noise. XD;;
There are some little eraser/lead/ink dots (2nd and 10th panels) and some pencil blur in the right of the last frame.
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Yep, I know about those.
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*squints* Waaaahh.... I THINK I see some.
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Page 2!
I really hope you continue with this, because a lot of online mangas often end before the end of the first chapter. o_o And this has got some serious potential! So keep it going! You're really good with toning too, so this page came out especially nice.
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Hmm.. actually, this is just a short story so it's actually only one chapter. But hey, after this one, I might start one that's a bit longer. ^__^
And thanks for the wonderful comment as always.
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i noticed that the killer and the future ayumi in the first comic had the same arm like thingymabobber on their arms. Coincedence anybody..?
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Alright! Someone noticed!
Wait... I mean oh snap. xD
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Good action blood scenes. Very effective. I especially love the top right panel.
You're releasing them one per day to torture us aren't you? 
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LOL, actually, I'm sure that I submitted it two days later... oh well.
And no, it's not to torture you.
I've actually got 5 pages finished, but just keep it between the two of us, okay? ^__^
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Awesome! ^_^ Still pulling me in, even if I don't know what's going on further than the immediate incidents.
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Thanksyou Katie
And hopefully the next few pages will finally end your confusion... actually, it might just get more complicated. xD I gotta learn to make my stories more coherent. >.>
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Soo much detail... soo pretty. I fell sorry for Ayumi and am starting to suspect someone has been watching/reading waaay too much Naruto. *coughUchihamasacrecough*
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Well, I did really enjoy 131.
And thanks for the complimetn.
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man so far looking great!!! i really hope that you continue doing this nonstop, and dont become like 70% of online comic artists that stop drawing when they finish page 5. anywayz, i really like this, and the irony that someone so cute and that looks harmless would kill a little girls family. good stuff!!
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Oh! She gets even cuter, believe it!
"dont become like 70% of online comic artists that stop drawing when they finish page 5"
What a coincidence! 5 pages, that's all I've drawn so far!
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I have to say, I'm liking this so far. Love the use of black in a couple of panels. Your toning is great too!
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I just hope you don't find the rest of it dissappointing. xD
And thanks for the compliment.
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You know what's weird, my main character in my manga is also named Ayumi....
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Seriously? LOL, and here I thought I had come up with something original. xD
She was originally named Ai-yumi... but I changed the spelling so that'd it'd be "correct".
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I assume...she takes her in and teaches her the ways of the assassin....and great comic...
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Ooh! Really close, and I mean really!
Oh and thanks.
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YOU SAID MOMMY! YOU DIE NOW!11!!!1!1!
Aside from that, it's great
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I thought you lived in Australia?
Traitor.
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I thought you lived in the UK.
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.....I do. What's that got to do with the price of fish?
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I've forgotten what we're talking about.
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...on Dragonball Z! LOL! Nice. That always goes through the back of my mind too, when I read something like "Next time..."
Wow, this reminds me of a scene from Kill Bill, for some reason
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You mean for that girl that Lucy Lou plays? Yeah, I was kinda thinking something along those lines... >_>
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Ah yes, that's the scene. OMG i was just reminded of the animated sequences with the over-exaggerated blood splattering! LOL!
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That was like my favourite part in the whole movie. xD
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It'd be more horrible if she just left without killing her. Or if she cut off her hand or something.
ANYWAYS. I'm loving this comic. Thought no real idea whats going on. Blood is better then a lot of the blood I've seen at DA! Extra points!
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Well, she's gotta do something, otherwise there'd be a witness running around.
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