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Elyra-Coacalina [2010-03-04 10:15:20 +0000 UTC]

sweetie, maybe her arms are too long... but to me she is beautiful !! you are very good at drawing !!!

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mari-mc [2010-02-28 00:01:30 +0000 UTC]

Really nice~

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Yasny-chan [2010-02-27 16:45:58 +0000 UTC]

very nice my dear!

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BigRob1031 [2010-02-26 22:26:56 +0000 UTC]

Great work Princess, if you ever need some tips let me know, i am always happy to help!

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Kieke-boe [2010-02-26 17:28:10 +0000 UTC]

*isn't going to repeat things that were said in the above comment, because that would be redundant *

Overall, this is a good start. To be honest, you have your contrast better down than many; you just don't apply it everywhere. You've got it going on in her hair, but, for example, you only use this sort of light-to-mid grey on her dress.

I also don't have as much of an issue with the falling (she's floating, in my mind); it's more that the pose looks really uncomfortable. All the joints' angle just look like they would hurt if I were to do them in real life. Do you understand what I mean?

One rather minor issue I have is where your fabric bunches and folds. I love the way her dress ruffles and folds around her legs at the very bottom, however some other folds (while adding needed texture to the picture) are unnatural. For example, while normally, yes, folds are created at the joints, her hip is sticking out so far that the fabric would lay flat cross it, and bunch at the top of her leg, right where it bends, and then fan out from there. (I hope you can visualize that ) Also the folds just below her breasts are a little odd. I can see no reason why they'd all pull to the right, because her shoulders seems pretty even (as in she doesn't seem to be pulling one up). Personally, I would have half folding to the left. You do, however, shade your folds nicely (though I stand by the fact that a little more contrast would help).

While I certainly commend you on the dexterity and patience it must take to draw all that hair in the exact same direction, and shade them the same way too (I mean that. I've tried it; it's HARD ) I'd recommend trying to break it up a little. Especially with straight hair like hers, it's hard to make it interesting (and aesthetic)to look at. But you already have swirls going on (which I like ) so I'd recommend adding in more, smaller ones. Break the hair up into strands, kind of like you did for her bangs. My biggest issue with her hair, though, is how you shaded the left bottom corner of the big strand in the front. You've shaded it like a thin ribbon with that dark streak. If you wanted to go to a highlight, you could have faded out the dark streak much higher in the bend.

Overall, great job though Looking forward to your next picture

Points: 3/0/1 = 4 points for Alces (please put your clan in your artists comment next time, it helps streamline things for me )

P.S. is my new favourite plz

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Impostor1 [2010-02-26 13:04:52 +0000 UTC]

Yo, you wanted some critique!
Well, i dun have a subscription so you've gotta be happy with just a comment

Where to start now...
Yaaa, i noticed that you are not using simple shapes as basics of your anatomy. Did anyone tell you that before? I noticed it is from some kind of art lesson? You could always tell your teacher to explain this to you, if you dun want to, i could do the same, just tell me. (another way is finding tutorials on dA) Anyways, those simple shapes would let the people you make actually have some volume, mass and more natural shapes.

Another thing is about proportions. The arms are way too long, the feet and the hands are too small, and i have a feeling that the head is too big.
Arms should be more-or-less reaching from shoulder to half the thigh (with hand included)
A spread out hand should be as big as the face. (if you want hands to look smaller, this could easily be done, but never change the proportions of the person just for the cause.)
A foot should be as long as the forearm.

Then, another problem is that the character is falling. She doesn't have any balance. Another thing that those simple shapes would help you with a lot. When you make a sketch out of them, it is much easier to see what is wrong with the character's position.

The character lacks volume in one more dimension. The shadows are too weak and there are no contrasts. She looks really flat, like she's cut out of paper. Don't be afraid to use softer pencils and try looking at how other pencil users are shading their stuff. Notice that some parts are as black as they can be, and others are white, without any pencil on them. That gives the drawing needed volume, and skipping that part is typical for many beginners. You should look into it.

I see you start to have a good idea of how the hair works, but at some points i find them too even. There are always single hairs pointing out, no matter how good the hairspray is Another thing is that on her head, i am not sure what the hair grows out of. Its like she was wearing some weird-shaped hat and then hair on top of it...

Ya, that would be it for now, i hope you will find it useful!

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gigikal95 [2010-02-26 11:59:53 +0000 UTC]

U HAV SUCH A GOOD LINEART!!~ it is awesome~

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