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Published: 2010-10-19 02:34:54 +0000 UTC; Views: 1160; Favourites: 25; Downloads: 10
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First page of my sketchbook for the Sketchbook Project .The title of this project isn't final, and this is the raw image without the text, and when I get the text done I will probably just update this image with it... but I wanted to kick myself to finish it by looking at what people think of the art itself. I'll maybe upload a few more pages in the next few days. Also I haven't uploaded anything since July.
The story isn't that original - it's simply a love story, though one with a gruesomely optimistic rather than unambiguously happy or sad ending... at least I hope you'll think so too.
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Jag gillar verkligen tomrummet i den hรคr! Underbart
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Have i hold you how much I like you crosshatching? Yeah. I know. I have. But still. <3
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Well, as I said on the first one: awesome.
This "sparkar arsle" so to speak.
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hey hun, you asked for a critque but i are to poor for the membership lol! but heres what i think of this.
the style is amazing! the pen and ink looks very good. the only thing i have to say ont he pen and ink is look up a few more stroke directions and textures. these one seem to be over repetative in use. just scribbles and straight lines. i know! you could add so much more depth to it than you did here. i've seeny our work and i know you can. you're just that good. the way that you have it with just the two or three textures make it look lazy.
next is the image itself. which is just F'in awsome. it has a very post appocaliptical feel and your blanance of white and black is exceptional and lends a very good "dark feeling" whith out making it "dark to look at".
your movement factor on the lamps droop is exepcional as is the "hint" of fire in the buildings, and the blowing of the smoke.
the only other thing i would think to add or change is oyu do have an expance of "white" between the boy and the lamp. i would put somehting there. its empty and throws the over all balance off. but its perfict if you were planing on putting like a poem or a picture focus point of color there. but if you do do that i would move the boy to his left maybe 1/2 inch to really bring full balance to the picture.
all in all after seeing what i have of your work i'd give this a 7 out of 10. its lovely and i really dig this style and i hope you keep at it!
i would also adore! seeing it.... expanded. yeah. that'd be sweet!
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Haha, I didn't realise not everybody can -give- critique. I thought even non-paying members could at least pitch in, just not use the system to ask for it? Ah well anyway, we all learn something new... Thanks anyway *^_^*
There is a large emptiness in all the images in this set, because there will be text 
Maybe some more depth could be nice. However I wanted the first page as clean as possible, and almost as flat, to give some depth when we zoom in and get to see things at street level rather than from a long way away, if that makes sense? Hopefully it'll make sense with the next pics, where I tried to do just that, though I'm not sure I liked them as much as the simpler pictures in this series, so hmmm...
However, page 2 is up now if you want to give that a go too
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most deffinatly . and yes it does make alot of sence! i also thought these were digital pena nd inks. my friend has a pait program she uses that does that kind of thing. its reare to acctualy see some one use REAL pen and ink any more. eaither way im off to look at the other ones
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I love it, you've got your own style and it looks very maintainable in terms of a whole story.
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Thanks! I struggled with it a few pages down the line, but eventually I think it straightened itself out.
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wow this is a really interesting picture i like it
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