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Published: 2013-06-21 16:50:08 +0000 UTC; Views: 7128; Favourites: 450; Downloads: 11
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Description Pressure:

You try to breathe, but you're barely breathing,

You can't think clearly; you can barely speak.

Your mind is filled with needless thoughts.

Your cheeks are red and feverish...

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You know what you must do,

But you can't bring yourself to do it.

Instead you jump into a thousand distractions...

Mindlessly seeking the thrill of the 'anything',

You cringe at the progress of time on the clock.

And with lips gone dry from an internal hell-fire

You continue to evade what you cannot face...




-Chen Yuan Wen, 22nd June 2013
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Comments: 81

JemmieMoon [2013-06-21 17:16:15 +0000 UTC]

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Impact


WOW! This really speaks to me. I was feeling this way last night. I can clearly envision this whole poem in my mind. Just the rush of all the emotion that you put in this is breath taking in my opinion. The impact from this was just BAM! There for sure and the originality is simple and comes from the soul. I have a clear vision of it yes and you seemed to know exactly how to put the very thoughts and emotions into this. It's short sweet and simple but does make a powerful impact. Nicely done!!!! I like this!

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WordOfChen In reply to JemmieMoon [2013-06-21 17:30:13 +0000 UTC]

Thank ye fer enjoyin' it, I hope tomorrow's will be even better ^^

Yer words light me heart lass :3

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates

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JemmieMoon In reply to WordOfChen [2013-06-21 17:37:28 +0000 UTC]

Anytime. If you want me to do more of the critiques just send em to me and ill be happy to to do em for ya. I really like that one that ya did awhile ago. Definetly described how I was feeling last night for sure.

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WordOfChen In reply to JemmieMoon [2013-06-21 17:57:57 +0000 UTC]

Haha feel free to critique on anything that comes out, it's always enjoyed ^^

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates

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JemmieMoon In reply to WordOfChen [2013-06-21 18:34:23 +0000 UTC]

alrighty then sounds good to me.

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MissMayhem1217 [2017-02-25 00:27:17 +0000 UTC]

I read like three poems and now I'm hooked

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WordOfChen In reply to MissMayhem1217 [2017-02-25 02:03:59 +0000 UTC]

Thank you for enjoying my work. I hope you will like both my new and old releases :'3

- Chennie

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Liefje-Saki [2013-07-28 11:00:50 +0000 UTC]

What a coincidence that I just stumbled on this after submitted my vent about pressure xD I have the same title which is what made me read yours

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catsonacid [2013-07-28 03:10:11 +0000 UTC]

This is great! 

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smokedragon [2013-07-16 10:11:58 +0000 UTC]

This was definitely how I was feeling last week. I've been taking an accelerated summer Statistics class, and I had reached a point in my comprehension of the material where no matter how hard I studied it, no matter how many times I practiced the concepts, I still couldn't grasp it. I felt like I was hitting a wall, over and over, all the while the deadlines going by. I knew instinctively that I was very close to comprehending it, and that it was some small, silly thing that kept me from it. That sort of thing is quite infuriating to me. In any case, I went a little bibbledy and took a very short unplanned vacation. I've since figured it out, and caught my work up, but this piece was a clear and striking reflection of just how intense those same feelings of pressure can be. Nicely done!

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noorelven [2013-07-13 16:34:23 +0000 UTC]

pressure is one perspective .. procrastination another

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crazy-aika [2013-07-11 21:52:58 +0000 UTC]

Just how i feel! it was amazing!

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tigemari [2013-07-09 23:35:32 +0000 UTC]

I didnt think there was a way out this really intrigued me I am headed right for the top no pressure just check it out
[link]

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Janee018 [2013-07-02 14:24:47 +0000 UTC]

Woah this is soo linked with one of my poems called "They are laughing, sniggering..." which is about the same thing, pressure. You hit the nail on the head about pressure by the way. I think the exact same thing. If you wanna check out the poem on my page do, because it's so strange how similar the poems are You don't have to check it out if you don't want to, mind you :L:L But it's really cool all the same that the two of us see pressure as the same feeling.

Love this poem

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WordOfChen In reply to Janee018 [2013-07-05 10:50:50 +0000 UTC]

Sure then, I'll have a look over o' some of them ^^

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates

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Janee018 In reply to WordOfChen [2013-07-05 11:33:35 +0000 UTC]

thankies

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GilPires [2013-07-01 23:47:02 +0000 UTC]

you basically just described pressure , that's what is putting a feeling into words xD

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WordOfChen In reply to GilPires [2013-07-05 10:51:01 +0000 UTC]

Aye pretty much, we've all felt it no? ^^

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates

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DomoSushiLuver [2013-06-30 19:44:02 +0000 UTC]

wow that's simply amazing

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WordOfChen In reply to DomoSushiLuver [2013-07-05 10:51:07 +0000 UTC]

Thank ye so kindly :3

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates

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DomoSushiLuver In reply to WordOfChen [2013-07-11 23:34:01 +0000 UTC]

no prob

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GhostOfTheEmptyGrave [2013-06-25 19:46:07 +0000 UTC]

Another one for my faves.

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WordOfChen In reply to GhostOfTheEmptyGrave [2013-07-05 10:51:18 +0000 UTC]

Aye, I only hope that more of me works please ya ^^

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates

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Creativesm75 [2013-06-25 14:05:53 +0000 UTC]

nice

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WordOfChen In reply to Creativesm75 [2013-07-05 10:51:24 +0000 UTC]

Thank ye kindly ^^

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates

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KelaLewis-Morin [2013-06-23 11:05:58 +0000 UTC]

Very well written with precise wording good job

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WordOfChen In reply to KelaLewis-Morin [2013-07-05 10:51:33 +0000 UTC]

Thank ye fer enjoyin' it me friend :3

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates

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KelaLewis-Morin In reply to WordOfChen [2013-07-08 22:02:20 +0000 UTC]

it is okay please feel free to check out some of my gallery if you have time

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crysanthemum963 [2013-06-22 21:31:03 +0000 UTC]

Ah what a poetic way of describing this .

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WordOfChen In reply to crysanthemum963 [2013-07-05 10:51:44 +0000 UTC]

Thank ye kindly fer enjoyin' it ^^

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates

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crysanthemum963 In reply to WordOfChen [2013-07-05 16:45:54 +0000 UTC]

^^ Glad I could read another poem from ya .

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Zephyras-Lied [2013-06-22 14:47:30 +0000 UTC]

I really love this poem During speeches, that's pretty much what happens to me. One time, I kinda spun the remote for a PowerPoint, and I dropped it. Anyway, keep up the wonderful work!

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WordOfChen In reply to Zephyras-Lied [2013-07-05 10:52:09 +0000 UTC]

Me thanks fer enjoyin' it m' dear, more be comin' soon ^^

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates

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Purple146 [2013-06-22 13:22:19 +0000 UTC]

This is very emotional. I rather like it a lot.

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WordOfChen In reply to Purple146 [2013-07-05 10:52:17 +0000 UTC]

Thank ye so kindly fer enjoyin' it :3

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates

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klystron2010 [2013-06-22 08:21:00 +0000 UTC]

So true. xD

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WordOfChen In reply to klystron2010 [2013-07-05 10:52:21 +0000 UTC]

Me thanks ^^

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates

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Miumy96 [2013-06-22 07:54:26 +0000 UTC]

i like it, if you read this you can feel it

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WordOfChen In reply to Miumy96 [2013-07-05 10:52:27 +0000 UTC]

Bwahaha, thank ye kindly ^^

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates

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Kyuzeth [2013-06-22 07:51:00 +0000 UTC]

This is very amazing. I'm certain many of us have had a rough time in their life at some point...

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WordOfChen In reply to Kyuzeth [2013-07-05 10:52:43 +0000 UTC]

Aye, that I know unfortunately. Tis society's way t' be pressurin'

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates

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Kyuzeth In reply to WordOfChen [2013-07-05 11:51:59 +0000 UTC]

Yes, society can be a huge burden...

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TooManyFlavors [2013-06-22 07:29:07 +0000 UTC]

I've been feeling like this my whole life..(well..most of the time)


love this poem

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WordOfChen In reply to TooManyFlavors [2013-07-05 10:52:52 +0000 UTC]

Oh aye, I can understand that fer sure x3

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates

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TooManyFlavors In reply to WordOfChen [2013-07-07 05:56:47 +0000 UTC]

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SylverFire-Lilithe [2013-06-22 07:00:26 +0000 UTC]

........that is how I feel everyday...... -_-

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WordOfChen In reply to SylverFire-Lilithe [2013-07-05 10:53:05 +0000 UTC]

In some circumstances, even I be feelin' that way :/

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates

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SylverFire-Lilithe In reply to WordOfChen [2013-07-05 14:27:03 +0000 UTC]

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Jae10 [2013-06-22 04:45:32 +0000 UTC]

Haha, first two things that popped into meh weird little brain, after I read this poem, was 'commitments' and 'procrastination' xD

But those aren't the reasons I really like this poem though - very nice, very nice indeed^w^

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WordOfChen In reply to Jae10 [2013-07-05 10:53:20 +0000 UTC]

Bwahaha thank ye kindly me friend ^^

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates

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