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Published: 2008-09-22 17:41:47 +0000 UTC; Views: 4730; Favourites: 165; Downloads: 47
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love, I let youlinger on
in places yet unseen
in the silent space
between
initial sparks
and how we're wired
my
dear, you are
discovered in
every memory undeparted
every poem I've ever
started
even haunting
odd synapses fired
I
fear, forever
following
a hand unclasped (still shaken)
a heart unheard until it's
taken
time to rest
uncommon sense retired
why
it's my
attempt
to ingest
starshine
'til admired!
it's my
intent
to become
all you
have desired.
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Comments: 156
of course, I remember you.
thanks so much for the kind words
and ongoing support.
it is very much appreciated.
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This poem is one of my absolute favourites! I came back to read it after two years and it still has the same awesome effect on me! You're a genius, sir!
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this is most certainly well written,i adore it.and your word choice is phenomenal.i kind of just met this guy about two weeks ago,so it's a new flame i suppose you could say.i have never felt this way in my entire life...but then again i am only 19 turning 20.so i have a lot more experience to endure.i just wish to write or have something written referring to this incredible feeling i get when i look at him or am around him.i honestly feel as if this were love at first sight.you are words just speak to me.you are my walt Whitman.my e.e. Cummings.etc.
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very glad you enjoyed
best of luck to you
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I just sucked all the air out of the room and tears came to my heart. It's something I'll remember for a long time.
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THE BLOODY FAVORITE BOX WON'T LOAD AND ALL OF MY BLOOD IS RUSHING TO MY FEET AND HANDS AND IM GOING TO KICK AND PUNCH AND THROW A GODDAMN FIT
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it seems to have worked out
xo!
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holy fuck
you know, i like to read your stuff and i never comment
but this is just
crazy fucking good
and im sorry for swearing
but i just don't have your way with words to describe how good this poem is
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much obliged. curse on.
xo!
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An awful lot of carbon dioxide has been cast today. Though it'd be more gradual if I didn't wait so long to read and sigh. ^-^ Wonderful as always, good luck
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Very nice! I like how you took the challenge.
it's my
attempt
to ingest
starshine
'til admired!
Yum.
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thank you, sir
xo!
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It has the loveliest flow to it... and it's something sweet too. Which I always like.
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thank ya kindly
xo!
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in the silent space
between
initial sparks
and the close:
Bravo, Shane, and good fortune to you and your poem!
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This is beautiful and sends my heart spinning.
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xo!
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This has to be put to music, the rhyme structure demands.
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perhaps
perhaps
perhaps
xo!
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A beautiful, beautiful piece. Especially the second stanza, finding the sense of her being in all the poetry and memories you have. Just wonderful.
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very much obliged, my friend.
xo!
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Truly a lovely piece. I love the flow and the word choices are excellent. Very nice work.
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