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Zaiav — Black voids
Published: 2013-01-24 21:16:04 +0000 UTC; Views: 1271; Favourites: 51; Downloads: 31
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Description A black void escapes my lips.
As the infection of pain takes over.
I’m screaming to an empty room.
In it lays all my fears.

My eyes are filled with parasites.
Seeing nothing but black.
Which leaks it’s way into my heart.

Trembling fingers, and sweaty palms.
Bugs clinging to my hair.
Nesting in my skin.

I have been contaminated.
By the sins of others.
Nobody can harm me now.
I have been contaminated
By the whispers of the heartless.

Reaching forth for some light.
It only seems to burn my skin.

My right eye has been removed.
And left with a hole.
Head spinning round’ and round.

Sitting in this dirty contaminated room.
A perfect fit for me.
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Comments: 43

Babou-Shka [2014-08-29 22:38:09 +0000 UTC]

Really nice, well done!

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Zaiav In reply to Babou-Shka [2014-09-06 00:18:22 +0000 UTC]

Thanks alot!

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Babou-Shka In reply to Zaiav [2014-09-26 02:27:57 +0000 UTC]

You're welcome

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Debbysh [2013-03-08 22:54:27 +0000 UTC]

#ArtSupporters has featured you: [link]

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Zaiav In reply to Debbysh [2013-03-09 21:09:45 +0000 UTC]

Thank you so much!

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Ketchup321 [2013-02-03 18:30:44 +0000 UTC]

I love the visuals. Do you ever sit down and just write whatever comes to mind? Get your mind thinking for a second and have maybe a general direction and then just write down whatever comes to mind? I think you should try that for practice if you don't already because I see some really good potential in here. I love the image of the eye torn out and bugs in the hair, sitting in a dark room with shaking, sweaty hands. It looks really cool, congrats

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Zaiav In reply to Ketchup321 [2013-02-04 22:10:15 +0000 UTC]

Thank you so much! Your comment made my day!!!

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waiting-for-wings [2013-02-02 06:42:56 +0000 UTC]

wow

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Zaiav In reply to waiting-for-wings [2013-02-02 19:09:11 +0000 UTC]

Hopefully that's a good wow?

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waiting-for-wings In reply to Zaiav [2013-02-03 04:30:55 +0000 UTC]

of course!

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nosedivve [2013-01-30 19:13:51 +0000 UTC]

Now this really does deserve a DD! You wrote this so well, (I love your word usage) and it really captivated me. Great job!

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Zaiav In reply to nosedivve [2013-01-30 19:53:49 +0000 UTC]

Thank you so much. I've never been given a DD but hope one day to do so! THANK YOU!

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nosedivve In reply to Zaiav [2013-01-30 20:03:17 +0000 UTC]

You are most welcome!

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zelaeii [2013-01-26 16:22:56 +0000 UTC]

Ooooh! This is simply amazing! So beautifully dark~ Your word choice is amazing!!

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Zaiav In reply to zelaeii [2013-01-26 18:25:55 +0000 UTC]

Thanks!

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DireWolfwere [2013-01-25 22:36:12 +0000 UTC]

OOooo this poem just takes me all over the place! It seems the narrator could be simply in mental anguish or literal harm.

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Zaiav In reply to DireWolfwere [2013-01-26 18:25:33 +0000 UTC]

Thank you! I think that's what I was going for! XD

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Opib [2013-01-25 16:33:43 +0000 UTC]

D: It was an amazing poem!!! "I have been contaminated
By the whispers of the heartless." I absolutely love that line XD

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Zaiav In reply to Opib [2013-01-26 18:25:46 +0000 UTC]

Thank you! I loved that line too!

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TheWSK [2013-01-25 05:09:13 +0000 UTC]

The words you chose were very visual. Great work.

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Zaiav In reply to TheWSK [2013-01-26 18:25:09 +0000 UTC]

Thank you! I worked hard~!

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Loxome [2013-01-25 04:47:27 +0000 UTC]

This is absolutely intriguing.

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Zaiav In reply to Loxome [2013-01-26 18:24:57 +0000 UTC]

Oh my gosh thank you tons~

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Loxome In reply to Zaiav [2013-01-26 23:04:06 +0000 UTC]

no thank you!

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PseudonymLizzieDeLov [2013-01-25 03:55:24 +0000 UTC]

This has potential!

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Zaiav In reply to PseudonymLizzieDeLov [2013-01-26 18:24:48 +0000 UTC]

Thanks~!

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Si1VeR-ReBoRn [2013-01-25 03:01:48 +0000 UTC]

This poem gave me chills lol, gr8 job!

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Zaiav In reply to Si1VeR-ReBoRn [2013-01-26 18:24:41 +0000 UTC]

Awe thanks!

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Si1VeR-ReBoRn In reply to Zaiav [2013-01-26 18:38:46 +0000 UTC]

Ur welcome!

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Irken-Chemnitz [2013-01-25 01:57:12 +0000 UTC]

Very good choice of words, made for some really good visuals.

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Zaiav In reply to Irken-Chemnitz [2013-01-26 18:24:34 +0000 UTC]

Thank you so much~~

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Zaiav In reply to Irken-Chemnitz [2013-01-25 02:07:58 +0000 UTC]

Thank you!!!

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seshinault [2013-01-25 01:31:24 +0000 UTC]

I love the word choice! The images I get while reading this are somewhat disturbing but all together intriguing. Excellent work!

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Zaiav In reply to seshinault [2013-01-25 02:07:50 +0000 UTC]

Thank you tons!!!! I am so happy I accomplished my goal!~

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seshinault In reply to Zaiav [2013-01-25 02:34:23 +0000 UTC]

You're most welcome.

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JoyfullDarkness [2013-01-25 01:24:27 +0000 UTC]

Amazing.

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Zaiav In reply to JoyfullDarkness [2013-01-25 02:06:58 +0000 UTC]

Thank you that means a ton!

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JoyfullDarkness In reply to Zaiav [2013-01-25 04:51:14 +0000 UTC]

You're very welcome! I'm glad it does.

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ltma [2013-01-25 00:27:53 +0000 UTC]

It is nicely written and really makes use of imagery well. I very much enjoy this.

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Zaiav In reply to ltma [2013-01-25 02:06:50 +0000 UTC]

Thank you so much!

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LuXun1986 [2013-01-24 22:11:48 +0000 UTC]

the dark corners of our insecurities is they darkest.

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Zaiav In reply to LuXun1986 [2013-01-24 22:25:53 +0000 UTC]

Yeah!

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LuXun1986 In reply to Zaiav [2013-01-24 22:53:02 +0000 UTC]

dont be sad.

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