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Published: 2016-03-31 21:23:59 +0000 UTC; Views: 1118; Favourites: 51; Downloads: 0
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Finished up this piece, which started a loooong time ago.Related content
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It's funny how I'm mentally projecting personalities on to the planets because it seems like a sitcom family waiting at the bus stop. This such a cool piece.
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What even made you check DeviantArt??
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I like to clear out my notification stacks every now and again. One thing led to another and I saw was your work
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That ring is great. Would love to see the composition broken out a bit more, so everything has more room to breathe.
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What do you think of this version: m.imgur.com/8iXp9AB?r
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I do prefer the change to the ringed planet, but they still feel a bit bunched up. The image seems divvied up into two distinct halves.
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Certainly an interesting composition with that babble of planetoids to the far left contrasting with the comet-like sun blazing diagonally. The planet ring also implies a kind of right-angle frame with the movement of the sun if you extend it out.
Only two things make me feel uncertain for now: (1) the shadow on the ring, and (2) the largest moon (left-most). I'm not sure 1 makes sense nor does it seem needed for the composition. I guess it could work if it had a more obvious relationship to whatever is casting the shadow, and it made another 'frame' in the shape of the image as a whole. Then the image would have a triangular frame. 2 sticks out with its lighting relative to the other moons and isn't contributing anything extra like the ring of that other moon. Its size is also drawing the eye needlessly into the corner. I'd suggest trying the image without it or making it smaller and moving it around. I feel that the real focus of the image is the 'frame' formed by the movement of the sun with the direction of the planets, moving the eye towards an intersection of the two near the sun. If the image still needs something extra, I'd look for that after trying the preceding suggestions.
One other thing. That banding is looking harsh. This seems to be a genuine technological limit to digital art. You may already know this, but there's only two things you can do: add more background lightness/noise to smooth out the transition, or work in a higher bit depth. The latter isn't much of a solution since you have to convert to 8-bit for most applications, which makes the worse banding reappear.
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Haha, both of those are elements that I was unsure about but left in anyway. The closest moon I left in because I liked the result itself, despite knowing it didn't really work in the image. I don't consider the ring shadow to be a compositional problem, but I'm not sure that the angle at which it is portrayed makes sense from a lighting perspective. This is actually a pretty common struggle for me and I don't find 3D modeling software to be much fun to use. The result is that sometimes I screw it up on my first few tries
What do you think of this proposed edit? i.imgur.com/8iXp9AB.png
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I've not tried to use 3D in years, but I'm thinking of trying Blender to help with things like perspective.
I think that looks much better, but I would like to see it with the original ring tilt. I actually found the different angles more interesting. Here the similar angles make it seem less focused to me -- which could make it better in a clever way, but I'm not sure.
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Thanks 
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Not currently, but always open to collaboration or commission, maybe we should team up if you're interested?
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