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GallantServer [2020-07-05 01:58:37 +0000 UTC]
I love that Pound Cake and Flurry Heart are in cahoots.
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MintyUniverse [2020-02-25 15:31:03 +0000 UTC]
Cute I like these.
And I can see English is not your first language. I hope it's ok if I give a few tips?
I notice 2 things: you use the wrong word sometimes, and leave out words where it would help the sentence flow better.
Wrong word:
He growed up to be a bodyguard
Correct word:
He grew up to be a bodyguard
Yes, growed up is past tense, but it's not even a word in the English language.
Word missing:
Is pretty oblivious to flurry heart flirting
Word added in:
She is pretty oblivious to flurry heart's flirting.
Along with the added word, I also out a 's at the end of flurry's name, because in the english language, when you refer to someone owning something, or something they do, you add a 's at the end to show that it's theirs.
I hope this was helpful. If you want more, I suggest reading fanfics or books in English. I can understand learning another language is hard. But I hope my tips were helpful and wish you luck. And reading helps a lot. I read constantly, and now I'm a bit embarrassed to admit everyone I know turns to me for spelling/grammar help because I know so much.
If you have any other questions or want any more tips, or just wanna chat, feel free.
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BunnAri In reply to MintyUniverse [2020-02-25 16:08:51 +0000 UTC]
Hi! Thank you for correcting me, i'm more than happy to learn from my mistakes♥ ♥ ♥, it was really helpful
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ashtoduski [2020-02-24 20:52:03 +0000 UTC]
OH my goshh i rarely see a lot of canon NGs (at least compared to OC NGs) but i love love love how you imagined Pound and Pumpkin!! im inspired even more to work on some canons now! Gorgeous~~
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BunnAri In reply to ashtoduski [2020-02-25 15:30:32 +0000 UTC]
Thank you so much! You are so kind!!! I'm glad it inspired you!!! ♥ ♥ ♥
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BunnAri In reply to Cassarts001 [2020-02-05 19:54:21 +0000 UTC]
Thank you!!!(´。• ᵕ •。`) ♡
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I-HAVE-MOVED-ON [2020-02-05 16:19:21 +0000 UTC]
they're so cute, their cutie mark muwa, pure perfection, I LOVE IT U SO SKILLED GURL!!!!
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BunnAri In reply to I-HAVE-MOVED-ON [2020-02-05 19:53:52 +0000 UTC]
OMG!!! Thank you sooooooooo much (ɔ◔‿◔)ɔ ♥
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lepoppeta [2020-02-05 16:05:46 +0000 UTC]
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BunnAri In reply to lepoppeta [2020-02-05 19:48:47 +0000 UTC]
AAA thank you so much!!! her cuteness it's too much!!
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