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Published: 2009-07-17 04:42:19 +0000 UTC; Views: 7450; Favourites: 97; Downloads: 0
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This is the only page without any narration. Splinter doesn't have the heart to say anything. and at the end of the page he's trying to listen to the strange noise he heard. Yeah you all know what's coming.
This page took a lot of time.
...hmmm. Guess I don't have anything to say either
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Now this is a moody piece, I like it.
Again with the interesting "camera work". I like that.
I must admit, I don't know what's coming, even though I get the feeling that I'm supposed to - but then that might have something to do with the extent of my fandom: happy to receive a movie after all those years, but that's about it. Because of this, I couldn't weigh in on the originality aspect of it... so I just stuck my marker in the middle. That's my definition of fair.
Your backgrounds and shadows and stuff here are all very well done indeed. They really contribute to the moody and desolate feeling I think you were trying for. High marks for technique there.
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XD I just meant it's pretty obvious Splinter's on the verge of finding young Raph. But I think considering you're not familiar with the fandom and what's been done your rating on that is fair
I worked hard on the first panel, for some reason it took a lot of time to pencil and ink and I'm not to sure why. Oh well. This is where I was starting to get the hang of where to put the dark shadows and not overpower the rest of the picture
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Actually, the reason I didn't know what was coming was because I, by some cockup, ended up critiquing in this order 1, 2, 3, 8, 9, 10, 11... and only realised it at the end, then went back and critiqued 4, 5, 6, and 7.
When I read that I was supposed to be expecting something, because I missed the previous pages, I assumed it must have been something from the Turtles universe I was supposed to be expecting - in reality, though, I was just a fucktard who clicked on the wrong buttons.
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Love the black splinter figure on teh first pnael - that whole sewer design and the way you show emotions!
This comic is really great!
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thank you very much X3 
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Really great scene to show a silent on how he can't say anything and really interesting all hope lost somehow being regain back. Great one! ^-^
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thank you very much
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Oh thank goodness! ...If that is Raph and not some, like, monster thing. I really hope it is Raph though. Poor Splinter needs some good luck.
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We'll have to wait till the next page to be sure
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thank you very much X3
there are a lot of places that open to the topside in this section of the sewer, so a lot of garbage gets washed down.
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Raphie's prolly in the box goin "damn garbage/blanket!"
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XDDD Or he's trying to eat a box.
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nom nom must taist like home
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OMG i love how you put the mcD's logo on the cups!! pure genius!!
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XDDD Thank you very much! I was wondering if any-one would notice
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This really conveys the feeling of loss. The wide shot showing the empty world shows the feeling that SPlinter is feeluing. Then hearing a sound and showing the general direction makes the reader scan the area as well and try and think of where the sound could've come from. It's getting close to the good bit now.
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I thought about putting tiny rats in the first panel but had to stop myself going "No! The panel is there to show how big the sewer is and how alone Splinter is! You can't put any crocs or rats or anything!"
I'm going to wait with the next page till the one after it is done too so I can release them at the same time because they really go hand in hand 
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I can see the thinking behind that. Trying to highlight the dangers and the feeling of isolation for Splinter. I have to say that those pages turned out really well.
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Love this page. Doesn't need a lick of dialogue at all.
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He really needs one at this stage 
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D: can i give you a hug so you can send it to him??
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thank you very much X3 and thanks for reading the whole thing
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^^ it was very nicely done. kept you wanting more rather than just going ~blah~ towards the middle. it was short, but you did very well to convey the emotions and story in those few pages. :3
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X/3 I'm glad to hear you liked it so much.
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Despite you had no narration everything was very understandable. Which is great!
I hope Raphie's okay and hasn't managed to get hurt or sick in his day in the sewer. Though it would be interesting to see how Splinter would cope with that...
Can't wait for the next page!
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thank you very much
Partly why Splinter is so scared for Raphie is also because if something serious happened to him Splinter doesn't have any resources or any-one he can go to for help. Even a simple fever could be devastating, but at this stage Splinter just wants to find him regardless of what shape he's in. There's so much for Splinter to worry about I don't know how he's able to keep walking to be honest XD;; I'd have curled up into a ball ages ago.
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It would be devastating. But thankfully it'll be alright.
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I really like your shadowing technique in the first panel! And Splinters pose in the last panel, that must have been hard to draw. Well done!
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Thank you very much X3
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You've conveyed the mood here beautifully. It's..so touching.
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Of course... on the other side of the nasty sewer stream.
Still, nice though. Clearly understood despite the lack of naration and I liked your selection of a non-specific sound effect for what he heard.
*returns to Splinter fangirl babble*
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XD Splinter will probably pull a ninja wall jump or something to get over that... if he's got enough energy left, he's exhausted.
Original the sound effect was specific, but I thought that was too cheezy and taking the audience by the hand so I made it as it appears here instead. glad you like it X3
Splinter really needs a cup of tea, a clean blanket and his children close by right now. Poor guy.
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