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Published: 2013-03-07 20:55:19 +0000 UTC; Views: 4551; Favourites: 255; Downloads: 55
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I loved the effect this poem has. It gives the reader a sense of what readers block is and can be... I have personally been through that sense many times before yet wish no other to experience it for it can change your view on the story and alter it from what you might have originally wrote if not for the writers block
I agree with a.deviantart.net/avatars/d/e/d⦠" alt=" " title="DerpAnimal" /> that the & sign should be replaced with "and" but disagree on the change of writers block, it is spelled correctly in the poem...
This is a truly unique poem..I love this in whole <3
I hope you continue with your most beautiful poems.
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Why should the ampersand be replaced with 'and'--as the symbol itself replaces and? lol
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Okay, I'll try this out~!
Pros:
β’ The grammar in this is very good
β’ Correct usage of vocabulary
β’ There is a lot of emotion put into this
β’ Very original concept
β’ Good concept
β’ Placed positive reactions into a negative situation
Cons:
β’ Hard to understand
β’ "&" should be replaced with "and"
β’ In the line "that's what writers block feels like," , "writer's block " is the correct punctuation.
~I hope this helped and I am sorry if anyone disagrees, this is my opinion and what I think the author should play around with for future poems or writings ~
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I think the use of '&' is supposed to be kind of a poetical thing.
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I don't know anything about writing to be honest...
merp sorry in advanced for anything else
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Thank you, I fixed 'writer's block'.
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I don't write critiques often, this is only my second; first on this account.
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No, no--it's fine!
Thank you!
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i can't express how beautiful this is. the words flow together like they are pebbles in a river. this poem is simply amazing.
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Wow....this is beautifully put! I'm a writer too, so your words struck a particular chord in me
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I love this. There's no other way to say it besides, I love it.
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sometimes, through all the abstract, we forget how powerful simplicity can be. this is gorgeous. you are truly talented.
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Thank you so much! I was trying a little different style with this one.
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This is beautiful, and rather fitting as you words had such a huge impact like a car crash
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Such a beautiful way to describe poetry.
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Are you sick, man? I was scared out of my mind when I made a fender-bender -- I thought I was going to jail for not being careful (I was new to driving at the time)!
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No, I'm not sick. And neither did I say the car crash itself was beautiful.
Wrecks can mean the end of lives. The end of a life is never good.
And, I'm sorry for your fender-bender.
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a lovely poem.
i've been in a car crash. (a roll over in the country on top of a hill)
i remember playing rock, paper, scissors with my friends in the back seat.
together we said, "rock, paper, scissors, shoot!" & right when we said shoot,
the car started rolling down the hill. it was like i pushed a go button. it all
went in slow motion. i looked at my mom in the front seat, then at my friend
beside me, & then i closed my eyes. all 3 of us kept saying "Jesus" over &
over again until it stopped. when it was over, some people saw us & flipped
the car back around (it landed on it's side). we rolled 3 times & i hardly had
a scratch, just some bruises form the impact. i was 11 then.
i don't remember being scared. i just remember holding on & after, crying
because i was relieved to be sitting in the grass waiting for the ambulance to come.
so i thank i know what youβre talking about. iβd call it beautiful.
i donβt know why, it just was in itβs own why.
but only after.
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I don't remember crying. I was around 11 too.
My mom went to stop at a red light, but her breaks gave out. The car didn't stop and we had a head on collision with an oncoming, speeding car. Our car started spinning and we eventually hit a pole. All I remember was being in the back seat with my sister next to me in the middle. It's suspected that out of reflex I grabbed my sister and held on. The men at the scene said that had I not grabbed for her, she more then likely would have went through the windshield because they found her seat belt wouldn't have held her due to her smaller size. I walked away with all those bruises. Her? One cut along her knee.
The aftermath, the realizing your still alive, that's where the beauty comes from. Adrenaline makes you see everything as brighter for a time.
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A lovely poem. The imagery you use is fitting, and I love the way you've structured this poem. Short, concise, beautiful.
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The best art makes you think. I literally said to a friend today that there's nothing beautiful about bruises. I still feel that way, but this piece made me stop to reflect, so clearly it's done its job.
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They are beautiful when you can say, "Hey I managed to only walk away with a few bruises, yay!"
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Despite the critics going against the '&' I quite like it. Little things like that are completely up to individual perspective, and there's likely to be people on both sides of that fence. But, overall, I very much enjoy this poem. The first line grabs the reader's attention, and the overall simile of the piece is definitely a strong punch to a human being's 'feelings' box.
The only line I feel that doesn't entirely fit is the line "Flashbacks." as the work itself gives a variety of images and memories to most readers without needing to invoke the word flashbacks directly.
In short: Great work, in my opinion. C:
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Well, some people seem to be confused anyway. With, or without it. lol
That line was actually longer before I eventually scratched it out.
Thank you for your opinion.
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This is full of emotion. Love it.
Stay inspired~ :>
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Thank you, I'll try.
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