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Lou-in-Canada [2010-05-01 03:12:32 +0000 UTC]
I was really surprised reading this! I'm not familiar with any of your other writings, but came to check out your gallery, and stumbled on this one. I tell you, for the first and main part.. I thought the suject was bullying. The way you described that.. I thought.. yay! Finally somebody tackles this again.. It was all sounding very.. real .. until "she closed her eyes and succumbed to the feeling"..
Then it took a different turn, and I was actually a little.. dissapointed.
I appreciate this was for a writing contest, and that it turned out a.. story, a fairytale, fiction. The thing is, itstarted out sounding pretty much non-fiction, to me..
I kinda feel that I'd love to know what Cecilia did to get away from her bullies, what attitude she's having, or going to have. And what memories she'll take along in her later years. Just.. to hear what the REAL story was. With a proper NON-fiction ending?
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XsquirrelXhaterX In reply to GirlWithAHat [2009-11-10 09:06:50 +0000 UTC]
i very much like your logic there...
oh, no, wait a second, that's not fair!! i'm a kid!!
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XsquirrelXhaterX In reply to GirlWithAHat [2009-11-10 09:27:34 +0000 UTC]
NOOOOOOOOOOOOOO
well you still can't stop me from eating it! YOU'LL NEVER GET ME ALIVE!!!!!
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