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Completed YCH for Sea-PancakeI also wanted to upload this one on dA since I'm really happy with the result! ;w;
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I'm a very harsh critique, and, even though you are an inspiration of mine I'm not going to lie whatsoever.
I believe the way her breasts are drawn are way too large, and without a bra, a bust would not look like that. My second concern would be the back. It is a little bit too arched, and doesn't look like it would hook up to the neck.
I do see you took the whole 'beach theme' into great detail, but with so many pieces like this, a different enviroment could also be preferred.
Other than these small overlooks, the anatomy is pretty good, and the shading is overall fantastic. Amazing piece, looking forward to see you improve!
-Nano
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This is very well done. I guess I'll share what I want to say.
The Positives:
- I like how the character was lined and the rest was lineless. It's a nice contrast.
- The background is very detailed in this one, and the difference in quality shows.
- I like how the whole setting has a very cool color pattete, and that the palm trees are dark blue and purple and not true green. It's a nice touch.
- The way you shaded the palm trees was very interesting. It was good, but be sure to use it in moderation.
- They way you made the water reflect the setting sun is beautiful.
The Negatives:
(I don't really have much to say here, so this is really just nitpicking)
- I like how you did the sand, but maybe make some footprints or indents in the sand visible? Also maybe show some wet sand around the water.
- I don't know if this is a stylistic choice or what, but you can see all of the eyes from under the hair. For an otherwise detailed picture, that is a little jarring.
All in all, this is so beautiful, you could probably make this into a postcard if you wanted.
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All in all, I'm going to say that despite some flaws this piece is absolutely gorgeous! But let's get to the critique!
Pros:
- There seems to have been put a lot of hard work in the details of the background which looks amazing. The ripples in the water, the sunset and the trees in the foreground really help to set a great atmosphere here.
- The character blends into the background very well. It's not like in some pictures where the character looks like it's pasted on. I think the colored lineart and the shading of the character helped really well with that. <3
Cons:
- I think what you need to work on most is anatomy. The forearms especially the right one is much too short. They should be as long as the underarms who are also a little on the short side I think.
- As was mentioned in the other critique, the sand looks a little hard and more like a rock. To make the character blend in even better, I would advise you to make her sink in the sand a bit there where her hands, knees and toes touch it.
Sorry for making this so long! I hope it'll help you improve more in the future though!
-SodaButts
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I will also add that the shading is amazing, but I think the boobs are a bit too round >w<
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I draw very round-shaped breasts as well so I don't mind that xD It's more of a stylised thing I think.
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Okay, you're going to have to bear with me here, as this is my first critique. I also apologize for anything that I may interpret wrong. Here goes!
First, I'll start with the good aspects.
The background is absolutely stunning. The water has a lovely soft gradient of the colors it is reflecting, and the glares of the sun shining off of the waves are nicely done; the water really makes this scene. The texture of the sand adds an element of realism, giving it depth and defining each grain. The flora is nicely done. The leaves and the bark add a contrast to both the style and the colors of the surrounding atmosphere, and it works.
The subject is just as great as the background. Her anatomy is fairly well-done, and the shading as well. Her hair has a nice flow to it, almost as if there's a gentle breeze coming through. Not sure if it was intentional, but it looks good and adds to the scene.
Now onto the cons.
Concerning the background there are really only two, possibly three things I see that need improvement. First, palm trees cannot survive as close to the water as the one on the far left. They need freshwater to survive and are resistant to saltwater to a degree, but being that close this one would get the absolute worst of high tide, which would overwhelm and kill it. Also, on the subject of the water, it seems to abruptly end at the sand. Water is gradual in a sense. It thins out more and more the farther up the sand it gets, and then it leaves a gradual wetness even farther up the shore. And the final thing I would advise though it is not bad as is, is to make the sunspots on the waves follow the form of the little ridges and make them just a tad bit more opaque. It would definitely make them more realistic.
Now for the subject. First and foremost, her boobs. They're too perky and round here despite her pose. Boobs on their own cannot retain such perkiness, especially with gravity being the main factor in this particular position. I like to imagine them as bags of sand when I draw them, if that helps any. As for the roundness, boobs are more of ovals with a blunt point rather than completely round circles. Next, her butt and thighs. They're really out of proportion. Thighs are usually between 3/4 the width of and the approximate width of the waistline, if you're viewing a person (or furry) from the side. Her fingers, as one of your previous critics stated, are out of form, but only on her left hand. Her palm should have curved to an end closer to her thumb. Also on the subject of her hands, as your other previous critic mentioned, some visible disturbance in the sand from them as well as her legs and paws would have helped to actually make her a part of the environment around her. And I come to my final nit-pick. Though the shading here is awesome, half of it is relative to the wrong direction. The light from the sun is well-portrayed over her fur and all in the right places, but it looks like there's another light source shining from the exact opposite direction as well. This is especially visible in strokes of the shadows over the sand. I think what would have fixed these is if you simply lowered the opacity of the highlights on the upper half of her body as a whole as well as extended her shadow in the opposite direction it is currently in.
I do apologize for being so critical, but I hope I helped at least a little. Thanks for reading this long thing, lol.
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I got to say, this artwork is amazing. But its does have some things that you should practice on!
Pros: the body shape is ideal and really good, and you added a lot of detail to it and took your time working on this. I can tell because its cute and I didn't turn out sloppy or crappy. the water looks so realistic and great, and so does the background.
Cons: the shading. The lighting should be where the sunrays from the sun in the background hit her body and in the back ground. Also, her shadow. Where is it?! And the shadows from the background of the trees and plants need to be shown. + its like you did two different drawing techniques here. Her body is cartoonish, while the background is more realistic. The sand wouldn't be even in all areas its shown in. It would have footprints in it and parts where it caved in from her weight and would be piling up in different direction from where the sand blew.
I'm sorry I didn't do the stars o. this critique, its because da is messing up on my laptop.
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You have done a fabulous job!!! I would only like to suggest maybe trying to shade and light things maybe a bit different??? I do think it looks good, but maybe trying not to make such a clear line where lighting is? Maybe a bit of a softer transition? And I noticed that the sun is behind her, but her eyes are highlighted to indicate that there is light in front of her. If that's supposed to be moonlight then I don't have anything to say and I think it looks nice, but if not perhaps not so much of a highlight? I definitely couldn't draw half as good as you, but I hope maybe these suggestions would come in handy. Looks great!!!
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Positives:
.The colours are very calming and work very well, like a beautiful and relaxed holiday on the beach
.The blurry background helps bring focus to the character
. Because the character is mainly dark colours the background is light around her so she stands out
Negatives:
.Something really bothers me about the top half of her body. Her right arm is shorter than her left, which would work if the perspective showed that its further away (if her body is at an angle) but it doesn't really. Putting the left shoulder lower down should fix that. Furthermore, because her back is so curved I don't think her neck should be so up right. Her head could be lower down and her neck extended down, but maybe this is more opinion. Idk if you can go into this pose and think it makes perfect sense than I guess it doesn't matter
.The background is really detailed but then the palm tree bark is down very simple. Just putting a texture overlay on it so it looks less smooth and real, and maybe even blur the closer one more so the 'lense focus' is on the character more
.Lastly, because the background is purple in the shadows I feel the shading on the character could be more purple and darker in some areas, that way she just blends in better
I hope the negatives don't drag your self esteem down or anything, you should still be very proud of this ^w^
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First off, you did a good job here. The colours look very nice together and add to the mood of the piece, and the composition is good.
Pros:
-Like stated already, the colours are very well organized and create mood for the piece.
-The background has lots of detail, but at the same time doesn't detract from the main subject in the piece with good use of lighting and also blur effects.
-Everything is very crisp and neat, making the piece easy to look at.
-The composition makes sure that no single thing in the piece stands out too much, causing the viewer to look at all the details.
Cons:
-The hands do look slightly odd. An example is the middle finger on the subject's left hand appearing to be quite longer than their ring finger and pinkie. This could be improved by practicing proportions and drawing hands from different viewpoints.
-The sand looks like it's hard. Where the beach overlaps with the sand, it doesn't look as if the sand is wet, and where the subject is sitting on the sand, there is no indentation or any signs of sinking into the sand, suggesting it is a hard, flat surface.
-It is somewhat difficult to tell how far away the subject is from the ocean, due to the sand looking like a 'flat' surface; however, it is nothing shading can't solve.
Thank you for reading this critique by the way, honestly I hope it helps you and isn't too redundant. I listed the main things I found about your artwork, both good and bad and tried to list them down. Stay awesome! e.deviantart.net/emoticons/b/b… " width="15" height="15" alt="
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the only thing i can pick out is that her cast shadow is off, it's almost directly under her, when it should be coming towards the "camera" because the loght source is behind her... currently, it almost looks like the light source is infront of her, according tothe shadow.
theres not much else wrong tthat anybody hasn't said... beautiful piece btw. the only other thong i can say is that the breasts are too round. could just be style, but to be anatomically correct, there should be a more gradual increase on the chest. something that really helps me that i heard, is to think of breasts as waterbaloons. teardrop shaped, almost starting at about the collar bone, and dropping down. hope i helped e.deviantart.net/emoticons/s/s… " width="15" height="15" alt="
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When I saw this deviation, I fell in love with it. The color scheme of the main character makes her stand out in the positive way, and the tribal markings add to the unique qualities of this anthro.
Your shading technique is brilliant! You know where to smooth it out and where to keep it edgy. It helps blend her into the background, while still keeping the center of attention on her.
The background seems perfect in every aspect. From the spacing to the balance of light and darkness, it aids in bringing the artwork to life. The detail on the waves and the sunset/sunrise is phenomenal. I also think that the plants at the very front really help put the female into perspective; they make it look even more realistic.
Since this piece is so beautiful, the only things I would edit would be dimming the bold outlining on the anthro, because the background doesn't have such dark borders. The other thing I would change would be to add a tad bit of that pretty baby blue to the tips or beginnings of her tail to keep the pattern intact, but even without it, it looks like it's completely natural.
Overall, this a beautiful piece of artwork that catches the attention of everybody who just happens to see a glimpse of it. Reaching your level of professionalism is my artistic goal, and I hope to one day be able to create such a masterpiece.
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Overall, this piece is gorgeous and the colors all compliment each other nicely.
Pros:
The water is very detailed, it's obvious that you put a lot of time into the ripples on the surface. The positioning of the character and the background are done so in a way that make you look around the piece, instead of just being drawn to one place while looking.
Cons:
The sand appears to be very flat and unreal. It should react to the pressure of her hands and legs pressing down on it, possibly by making her sink into the sand a bit?
Hope this helps! <3 You did a fantastic job!
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Adding to that, there isn't any flotsam, sea shell bits, or animals of kinds washed to shore. I mean, that's just details. One other and last problem I got is the shading.
She has a shadow beneath her when the light source is behind her.
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I agree with this critique, the sand looks a bit hard.
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Wow, I gotta tell ya this looks amazing. And it seems like you used the advice in the critiques, which is a really nice way to improve in your art.
Pros:
The water looks very glimmery and glowy, it's beautiful!
The plants and such that are out of focus still have lots of detail, which is nice.
The lighting is spot on!
Cons:
The fingers look a bit wonky, so you might want to practice sketching them in a bunch of positions?
The white glow goes nearly all the way around the tail, when it's really only needed where the light hits.
Now I'm not as good an artist as you, but these are just suggestions. Hope they help. Thanks for reading~
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The tail thing. Hm... I don't see it. It seems more like a glare from the sun. My only issue with the glare of light is that sunsets have very soft light because of our horizons. It makes sunlight so soft, you literally can look directly at the Sun without doing any damage.
Therefore, the glare is unecessary.
However it's a very pretty effect.
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I agree, being that the finger seem slightly off! Its kinda nice to see someone actually critique her art instead of being like ' OH MY GOSH ITS 1000% PERFECT NOTHINGS WRONG ' because there is no perfect of anything.
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Yeah! I agree she is an amazing artist, but everyone makes mistakes. Thank you for pointing that out
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I don't see anything wrong with the fingers... :\
The tail I kind of agree with.
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I REALLY like this picture! The line work, colouring, shape and overall composition of the pic is just great.
The only... and I mean ONLY negative I can possibly give is that the shadows don't match up with the light source (the sun), especially when it comes to the shadow on the sand itself (should go almost the exact opposite way). Funny enough, the shading on the lineart is pretty much perfect.
Even if you don't decide to change that small oversight, this is a beautiful picture. I think the commissioner is going to be more than overjoyed to get this image. I know I would if it were me. ^-^
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im not good at critiques XD but i really like it so I'm going to give you all stars. Its just on thing not a big deal, but i think the shadow of the furry on the sand is facing the wrong way, because the sun is behind her so the shadow should be facing the opposite way of the light, just a suggestion ;w; But overall i love it, i have to fill this whole space up so I'm just going to type random things XD
How do i critique? How do i critique? How do i critique? H
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Hello sexy! That ass is wow! And her body is just asking to be loved!!
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I think she looks really great & cool!! I just wish she had some clothes on.
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Its awesome and cute. I can see why you would want to too.
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So hawt!! *crosses fingers* please say yes, when I ask her on a date, please say yes*
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When i first saw this i was amazed!
The furr looks so perfect!! and her colors and markings just make it POP!
i can't get over the background it's so asdfging beautiful! : D
AMAZING ART!
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Eeep so cool! Dat fluffybutt tho too much for meee *_*
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You furries disgust me on a level I never thought imaginable.
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