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eres:fire-pit-pit-of-my-stomach
feeling,
warm champagne for my insides
vos me caes
like
Autumn's daylight sliding down my throat-
seeping in through the holes in my skin until my kidneys glow
white-blue
waves-like-wings to carry me cos
i've dreamt of soaring this underworld
contigo
with heavy limbs &
f o u rΒ Β in-this-moment eyes,
keeping "Far" far away
Let's don't quite recall the deep breaths we took, only why we took them.
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Ohmygosh you do not!! Thank you so much. ^_^
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I do. 
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Your wonderful literary work has been chosen to be featured by DLD (Daily Literature Deviations) and has been selected as our Pick of the Day. It is featured in a news article here: [link] and on our main page.
Keep writing and keep creating.
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The last line is simply astounding.
Oh, and the authors comment gave me goosebumps.
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Oh gosh! You're so sweet thank you so much!!
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I can hear your voice reading this to me. Even though I've never heard your voice before ehehheh.
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Ohhhh I totally understand that!
This poem is soooo me. (:
Thank you thank you!
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Your great work has been featured here: Friday Night Features
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Oh what an honor! Thanks so much!
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Your style is refreshing and innovative. Thank you for being yourself in your writing, that's not nearly as common as it should be.
Thank you for fayving, "I's the Summer Night's Cocaine," it always means more coming from writers like you. Keep reading my stuff, I'll keep enjoying yours.
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Thank you so much! I don't see much point in trying to be anyone else. (:
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New muse? Hey, awesome! I have a new muse too. 
I'm as happy as I've been in years, and I was really worried for a while, because you told me yourself: "I wrote all my best stuff after relationships were over. Nothing worthwhile came to me while I was happy. What a silly word."
But I think you were wrong to say that back then... because you seem pretty happy right now... and this is WONDERFUL.
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Oh my goodness!!! 
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This is beautiful. I adore this line: 'Autumn's daylight sliding down my throat-'. The last line is wonderful too, and I love how it being at the end gives it extra meaning, what with talking about the depths of the sea and everything. I also love how that last line is in bold, giving it added weight. Your use of Spanish here is intriguing, too.
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I like to keep your comments in my inbox for a while cos they're so nice and I love reading them over and over. ^_^ I'm so glad you like my Spanish! (:
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Aww! Your work is always so lovely, I can't help but leave lovely comments.
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autumn's daylight sliding down my throat-
seeping in through the holes in my skin until my kidneys glow
white-blue
oh, wow.. that is so brilliant, with the most magnificent colors and films wrinkling their way through my mind
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Yes yes yes! Thank you so much!!
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you're welcome
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london!!!! i am so ecstatic to be reading this!!! i love it so so much!!!! you have been so missed!!!
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Awe thanks honey!!
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with heavy limbs &
f o u r in-this-moment eyes,
keeping "Far" far away
and your artist's comments are my favorite. this is so so lovely. the title fits perfectly. oh how i have missed your writing like whoa.
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Thank you so much! I thought of just writing another poem to put that comments bit into it.. heehee! It just seemed to fit with the theme.. he's wonderful! I've missed yours too love. (:
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Love the last line, but btw...is "vos me caes" supposed to be spanish? What does it mean? Because if it means what it think it does, I think you have conjugated it a bit wrong.
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Thanks! And I am actually quoting someone else when I used "vos me caes." He said that in Nicaragua where his family is from that they use "vos" instead of "tu." The expression means something like "You are appealing to me," or "I like you." (: Someone else commented that maybe there's supposed to be an accent but I wouldn't know. Haha! Thanks for the comment!
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ah, i'm back. sorry.
i read it differently, that phrase, vos me caΓ©s means actually, if alone, "you are to me..." and i think it goes perfectly with the rest of the poem. you are to me like autumn's daylight sliding down my throat.
the complete expression that means "i like you" is "vos me caΓ©s bien" = "to me your are good". the cut phrase sounds really good anyway, even if it doesn't mean "i like you".
btw, the accent goes in the Γ©. caΓ©s.
caes -> tΓΊ = tΓΊ me caes
caΓ©s -> vos = vos me caΓ©s
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Oh alrighty! That all makes sense now. I'm just glad the poem works as it is. XD.
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No no it makes sense now because me cae bien means to like so if they say vos instead it makes sense, however, I do believe the verb is reflexive so it should be me cae instead of caes, but that may be the phrasing in Nicaragua...idk, I'm just looking at it from a grammatical standpoint lol.
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Welllllllllllllllllllllllll I have no idea! (: I just went with it cos it was sweet of him to say.
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lol, perfect
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The juxtaposition of contraries is beautiful as ever; also, I'm in love with the way you end your poems, with these startling little stray pieces of light so carefully placed.
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What a beautiful thing to say! Thank you so much! ^_^ I think the endings of poems are the most important. They should make the reader want to go back and reread the poem to understand it better. (:
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As, in this case, they do.
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Words cannot express how much I adore your writing.
xo
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Thank you so much love!
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Beautiful, always such a wonderful inspiration hun
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thank you so much!!
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Youuuuuu.
"[...]seeping in through the holes in my skin until my kidneys glow"
A beautiful line. Paints an image that is both delicate and macabre. I love it, as I do all your works.
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No, youuuuuuuu!!!!
I love playing with that whole sort of mmacabre texture in my writings! It makes things sink in deeper I think. Thanks love!
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i'm very intrigued about the use of the spanish here, why do you use "vos" in the first part?
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