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exquisiteoath [2011-11-29 14:59:37 +0000 UTC]
second stanza is transcendental. Beautifully wrought.
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toxic-nebulae In reply to Lovespoon [2011-11-24 00:55:31 +0000 UTC]
I see no reason to keep myself from making improvements.
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AlecBell [2011-05-14 10:14:41 +0000 UTC]
This poem is fascinating psychologically. The protagonist employs a searching test fro her unfortunate suitor. But perhaps there was something for both of them to learn.
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toxic-nebulae In reply to AlecBell [2011-05-14 11:45:15 +0000 UTC]
it's always interesting when people know more about my poems than I do
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AlecBell In reply to toxic-nebulae [2011-05-14 11:52:50 +0000 UTC]
Or see from a slightly different point of view?
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RequiemsandReveries [2011-05-10 00:43:10 +0000 UTC]
wow.....deep sigh and nodding my head
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SkysongMA [2011-05-09 14:19:38 +0000 UTC]
The imagery is lovely, especially in the last stanza.
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AlisonBlue [2011-05-08 22:58:09 +0000 UTC]
stunning piece.
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Sneds [2011-05-08 22:51:49 +0000 UTC]
I like this poem a lot, in fact I think it's the most incisive poem I've seen from you recently.
My only quibble, and this is a personal perception, is the line...
'flurried uselessly about my head'
It feels slightly out of sync to me, in both tense and diction.
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Sneds In reply to toxic-nebulae [2011-05-08 23:03:53 +0000 UTC]
You are most welcome.
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toxic-nebulae In reply to Lovespoon [2011-05-06 23:08:42 +0000 UTC]
we can, I think, all learn something from Hamlet
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toxic-nebulae In reply to Lovespoon [2011-05-08 22:23:50 +0000 UTC]
It's not my decision alone; there are three people who vote on whether or not pieces get accepted, and they need two votes to get in.
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toxic-nebulae In reply to Lovespoon [2011-06-24 20:56:20 +0000 UTC]
poetry and reading and more poetry.
and you?
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toxic-nebulae In reply to Lovespoon [2011-06-24 23:51:24 +0000 UTC]
all delightful fun.
if it does, it's rare.
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toxic-nebulae In reply to Lovespoon [2011-06-25 00:31:55 +0000 UTC]
oh, I know.
not that I'm perfect, of course.
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toxic-nebulae In reply to Lovespoon [2011-06-25 01:00:30 +0000 UTC]
exactly. just because you think critically doesn't mean you're always right.
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LoveShotEyes [2011-05-05 12:00:45 +0000 UTC]
Gah. Yes. This.
xo
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FuzzyHoser [2011-05-04 21:40:55 +0000 UTC]
Giving in a bit? Sounds like the stubborn girl's admission...
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