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Oilux — Things you never forget.
Published: 2011-09-24 22:08:58 +0000 UTC; Views: 17325; Favourites: 892; Downloads: 202
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You never forget:Your first day of school.
Your first boyfriend.
Your first kiss.
Your first date.
Your first time.
Your wedding day.
Your childhood.
The day you graduated.
The day your child was born.
The day you did something amazing.
The day you get hired.
The day you get fired.
The day you got recognized.
The day your dog died.
The day you cried at a sappy movie.
The day you did something stupid.
The day you had fun.
The day you didn't care.
The day you wanted to die.
The days you were happy.
All these things happen.
Things that you will never forget.
You might not remember all the details or the date
But you remember what's important.
These things that you never forget
Always have the biggest impact on who you are.
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Comments: 217
they days you wanted to die.......... oh yea playing that game flappy bird and you get so high then you fail before reaching your goal........
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The day your world shattered in front of your eyes.
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I'd rather forget my first kiss,but it's still there....=/
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Meto my first kiss isnt a pleasant memory either.
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Quite true, but then there's those that forget to remember.
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Hey, comments are back up! Back when you put this up, I posted a reply to one of the most short-sighted comments, came back later, to check for updates and found that comments were deactivated. Even though I didn't contribute, I felt bad. Again, I will say it is not a crappy poem. It may lack in finese, but it makes up for it in content, and meaning.
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Sorry about the delay, but you are very welcome.
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"And after reading through ever single one of those bitchy god-be-damned comments, i just have to say this: SHUT THE FUCK UP."
While I can't speak for everybody, I will say with complete honesty that my now-hidden comment "The day you wrote a poem in five minutes and it got really popular for some reason", was nothing more than a passing comment about this poem's strange popularity. If anything, it was a knock against the deviantArt community for embracing it so much, not against the author. (But really, it was neither.)
It's not like the comment went "You're too popular, you suck." or "How dare you let this get so many views?" It was just, "This is more popular than one would have expected."
My guess is that most of the 'negative' comments were the same way. You can try being a little less sensitive. I mean you're the one calling people 'bitchy' and 'cruel'.
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I think that it is true that there was a little overreaction, but some of them were really rude, and others were simply stating something that was already said, and adding nothing new to the string of comments. My point is, that if you are going to comment on the flaws of the poem, use constuctive critisism, so that your comment has some worth. As for the poems popularity, some of it may have come from the comments themselves. I favorited this poem for the purpose of supporting a rising poet, and to counterbalance the negativity. There is also the chance that some people prefer to support poets who are not perfect, because they like to give someone support, and watch them grow and improve. This explains why some people like indie music and whatnot. The artist are more on their level.
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Ahhh I remember all of those things I love ur poem so all those other pepole can fuck of lol besides what really matters is that u love ur poem great work great memories *sigh* back when things we just a bit more fun and innocent *sigh* 
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Whyy does this have a thousand favs?
No offense, it's not that bad or anything. But it's not that good either. I've read poems that really made me feel something amazing that have less than 50 views.
Some of these 'unforgettable' moments I have chosen to forget simply because they are unpleasant. But yes, I don't remember them for years at a time, until I read something like this I suppose. 
And you know, if this was not written for us, then why did you post it here? You could es well just send it to your friends only. They are bound to only say good things about it.
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Lol I forgot my first day of school.
But it's true the details aren't important.
The important thing is, you know it happened. (Or did it ... ? *Inception themetrack*)
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Well- I think Its quite cute and simple- maybe more specific would have more of an impact? Like the kiss on your wedding day or something...
This is site is public- meant for people to critic other peoples work, you are bitching too with your last comment and feeding the trolls.
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Now THIS is Art; thought-provoking and nostalgia-invoking.
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Though some of these things haven't happened to me yet, it still made me think about what has happened so far in my life and you know what, it has been pretty damn good.
Thanks for that. ^ ^
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I'm sorry people are assholes and can't keep their judgement to themselves. I wrote something similar to this, a "list poem" if you will and it didn't even make it to the front page. So be proud of this
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This is not poetry. It's a list. A very prosaic one, at that. Not even remotely original, either.
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Are you going to offer some useful critisism? If you do not like it, feel free to not like it, it is not nessesary to share why you think it is insignificant. I agree that it is not the most original piece, and the list does not have a good flow, but these are trivial imperfections. What I pay attention to most is a poem is content, and purpose. This poem it seems to me is a reminder of all these things that make a person who he or she is. It is not meant to be witty, or funny.
Sometimes, even a peom's lack of poetic beauty due to its humble existance is what makes it a good peom. It may be because the poet is trying to do something else,or the poet is inexperienced; Either way, it is poetry. Whether or not it is good poetry is dependant on what you are looking for in a poem. Even then, it is what you make of it.
If you are going to offer reasons why you do not like the poem, please offer it in a manner of constructive critisism. Your negative opinions are one thing, but you also stated that this is not a poem. The definition of poetry is just about as ambiguous as the definition of art. Therefore you can not say with certainty whether or not is is a poem. It seems your negative feedback serves no purpose, whether it is to help Dark-Moon-Forever make better poems or otherwise, so it would be more polite to keep your pointless opinion to yourself.
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While I understand the concept behind the poem, and I think it certainly has merit, the issue is in the execution. What this poem could benefit from greatly is a form. I understand that many find problem within the concept; however, I think what is most problematic is the way it is presented. There is no art to it, no reason, nor is it truly in terms of poetry very good. And if you would like to disagree with me on that particular subject, please feel free to go take a writing workshop in poetry and see how well this sort of poem would do.
What I would recommend for you as a young writer and young poet is to take a moment out of your time to consult some classic poetry, and I would like to make a suggestion here for Elizabeth Bishop's "One Art" (here is a handy link to said poem on PoetryHunter: [link] ). Bishop uses what would seem like a very basic concept, loss, and in form tackles the subject (for simplicity's sake that is my description of the poem). Practice some form, some meter, be care with line length and word choice. Poetry is not about simply listing off words in less sentences than a novel or short story. Poetry is a very delicate art of language, and to even begin writing it you must be aware of that. One last recommendation to assist you on the road to becoming a poet, I would suggest that you pick up a text on the basics of poetry, and in particular I would suggest Stephen Fry's "The Ode Less Traveled."
Good luck in all future poetry and writing endeavors!
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careful*, apologies for the misspelling.
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i once read that all you are is a sum of your memories
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You lost me at "First day of school", because that memory is LOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOONG gone
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Same.
I don't remember half that stuff, XD. Oops.
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GUYS. This has been said before (probably), but I'm going to say it again.
You don't have to take this so seriously. It's not something that takes a week of nonstop coffee-guzzling and late-night frantic typing marathons to complete. I KNOW it's not perfect. I KNOW that not all of these things apply to every single one of you. But at least one of these is going to have had, or will have, some sort of impact on you and your life. Is that not good enough? You seem to be jumping on her because this made the front page. Ever wonder why? I'll answer that question. It's because SOMEONE thought this was meaningful in some way. Sure, it's a relatively cliche piece. So what? Don't tell me that everything you've ever done was completely original and wasn't at least inspired by someone else. Because that's not true.
So, to recap my lil' rant here:
It's not perfect. We all know it. But at least it has some kind of meaning.
Front-pagers seem to get a lot of hate. But this had some actual thought put into it. Don't kill yourself trying to find issues with the poem, because, let's face it. If you wanted to, you could very easily criticise pretty much every art piece on dA.
If it's cliche, then that doesn't automatically make it bad. Just . . . cliche.
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Thank you! Exactly that, I look at other comments people on the front page get, and I never thought people could be so cruel.
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Aw, no problem.
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Thank you, I most definetly will.
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