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swordscomic — The Devotion

Published: 2011-02-05 05:54:05 +0000 UTC; Views: 767; Favourites: 25; Downloads: 5
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Description [Part of the Kotamayu series]

"The stars rarely acknowledged mortals. And this time of genesis was no exception."

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Darting across the field, she swung her arm hard and the racket connected with the ball. With explosive tension it was repelled back over the net, zipping past her opponent and ending the match.
A whistle blew and the crowd cheered quietly, tired and impatient of the hot summer sun.

She ran. She leaped. She danced against the flaming ground. Burning gases licked at her bare feet as she twirled and swept across the surface of a shining star.
Tennis was so long ago now. But it couldn't compare to this.

a voice echoed down to her.

She knew what was coming next. She was excited to be seeing people again after so long.
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Comments: 10

CuilEggs [2011-02-06 14:39:14 +0000 UTC]

Critic... comparing to a perfect body ratio her legs are tad short, but I'm unsure if that's her uniqueness. Also shoulder+collarbone are too low.

I like her best though, she story sounds hopeful.

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swordscomic In reply to CuilEggs [2011-06-19 05:28:14 +0000 UTC]

You're quite right, of course.

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Zombard [2011-02-05 18:22:12 +0000 UTC]

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swordscomic In reply to Zombard [2011-02-27 02:13:33 +0000 UTC]

Okay, I'll keep that in mind. Thanks.

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rajee [2011-02-05 13:41:30 +0000 UTC]

Awesome!

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swordscomic In reply to rajee [2011-02-27 02:18:22 +0000 UTC]

Thanks .

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VitaminxComplex [2011-02-05 13:22:22 +0000 UTC]

i know you want a critique, but im bad at critiques when they are better than me. lol its bad ass dude

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swordscomic In reply to VitaminxComplex [2011-02-27 02:18:56 +0000 UTC]

Thanks.

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zachariah-the-weird [2011-02-05 06:51:10 +0000 UTC]

i'm liking the redesigns

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swordscomic In reply to zachariah-the-weird [2011-02-27 02:21:13 +0000 UTC]

Thanks .

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