Comments: 55
inuyasya84 [2007-08-12 05:05:47 +0000 UTC]
you write as if you feel this pain of isolation and loss... your words, leave me breathless as i do feel this loss of direction and isolation. the emotion that this conveys is so intense but yet so heartfelt. thank you
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errormacro6 [2006-02-01 08:37:32 +0000 UTC]
that was awesome and made me shiver...
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DuskDragon [2004-10-01 11:19:22 +0000 UTC]
Beautiful. I love the atmosphere of this poem. It speaks to me on so many levels. I was wondering, how long did it take you to write this poem? I find that the more intensely emotional poems come quickly in a powerful rush. I just wondered if other people experience such things. Please reply.
Great work! Keep it up.
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deathjanissary In reply to DuskDragon [2004-10-02 03:36:54 +0000 UTC]
It took me 30 mins. Roughly, I'm glad that you liked it. Poetry was never my thing though.
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lelekelley [2004-06-10 20:17:20 +0000 UTC]
Beautifully lyrical, I could almost place it to music and sing it in my head. I love poems that work like that.
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non-sciential [2004-02-13 11:58:06 +0000 UTC]
I think everyone at one point can relate to this. Though, I must agree some of the bigger words seem a little inapplicable to the feeling of the poem. I also have this tendancy in a lot of my work, getting lost in words--I tend to think more complexly than I articulate.
Awesome stuff, keep on.
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lestismitethee [2003-11-06 22:10:57 +0000 UTC]
brilliant! love how your words overflow with emotion ;] - Gally
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fucklife [2003-10-24 04:56:26 +0000 UTC]
WOW
you have outdone yourself, its amazing
it blew my mind away
u know that feeling where u just have to get through the poem and maybe ull start liking it? or the other feeling of awe, where everything else besides the poem disappears,
the second is what i felt with this poem of yours,
i would favorite it, but me and my computor are having another argument so the favorite will have to wait until i go to my dads again, hopefully this weekend.
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voixdelaraison [2003-10-23 06:46:03 +0000 UTC]
This blows donkey balls the size of Texas. Start from scratch.
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jesusbite [2003-10-22 19:34:34 +0000 UTC]
The reason of why it is angst is because you 'poured your everthing' into it.
Its still raw, unrefined, unedited emotion.
EVERYONE feels these emotions.
Learn to harness them and express them in different ways, and you could go somewhere.
Your language suggets that you would be a decent writer with practice.
But then again, hey, we all need practice.
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eelang [2003-10-21 01:00:52 +0000 UTC]
nice work, definitely feeling the flow.
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VaDruid [2003-10-18 07:52:44 +0000 UTC]
---Thoughts from the Druid---
Here I lay upon this deaths bed, surrounded by loved ones. Dressed in their sunday's best, crying their goodbyes to my deaf ears.
Well done Death!
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scarred-angel [2003-10-18 01:58:47 +0000 UTC]
good work, the feeling of being trapped under
your ownn skin is one that I only know too well !
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undefinability [2003-10-17 22:38:31 +0000 UTC]
The idea that evolved in this piece really spoke through the soul. You vented a lot of emotions and feelings that were both astounding and hurtful, it must have torn you up to write it - though, that's what poetry does. To release the demons, you have to hurt yourself a lot worse in order for happiness. Excellent job, man.
And excommunicate is not a hard word to know, and if you think it is, you really need to take a look into a dictionary. The assumption that he used Thesaurus for this piece is so ridiculous, I can't even fathom the nerve to even ask a question; who fucking cares whether anyone uses Thesaurus or not? If that's what they need to use to get the flow and their entire emotion outside and onto the paper of the poetry, then so be it - I wish the best for them. There's no need to take a perfectly good chance for a comment and waste it by beating and tormenting their vocabulary. Try to stick with the poetry at-hand, and not the process of how the piece was written - how the words were thought of. Ever think the poet just has a good vocabulary, and thought of the words that would fit the best? . . it's not so far-fetched when you think about it.
Excellent writing, man.
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wtFOOK [2003-10-17 18:59:04 +0000 UTC]
lovely. and heart wretching.
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reV0luti0n [2003-10-17 17:58:52 +0000 UTC]
ugh ugh ugh mudvayne-motivated poems...*sigh* what is this world coming to?
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huronblakhart [2003-10-17 06:46:52 +0000 UTC]
i like the intent, i dont know about the execution tho'?
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cashshoe [2003-10-16 21:29:51 +0000 UTC]
wow.....
that is amazing
truely
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gothmind [2003-10-16 11:39:01 +0000 UTC]
effing hell. This aint shitty bro. THIS AINT SHITTY. +fav
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sam666 [2003-10-16 11:19:32 +0000 UTC]
wow, powerful stuff there...very awsome indeed and Far from shitty welldone!
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the-firey-kage [2003-10-16 07:10:09 +0000 UTC]
holy shit you think this is shitty
how in the world could you have ever ever liked my poetry if you think this is shitty
mine isn't even on the same level as this and this is shit
and that ladies and gentelmn is the reason the-firey-kage
will soon cease to exist
i'm not even good enough for crap
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elysiumdarkstone [2003-10-16 06:45:30 +0000 UTC]
different, very different
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rottedaspersions [2003-10-16 00:32:46 +0000 UTC]
It's so beautiful, sad, melodic.... :tear:
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wernstrum In reply to wernstrum [2003-10-16 00:33:21 +0000 UTC]
excommunicate? come on
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poisonfrog In reply to wernstrum [2003-10-17 03:12:26 +0000 UTC]
give me a break - "excommunicate" isn't that tough of a word to know
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deathjanissary In reply to wernstrum [2003-10-16 00:37:17 +0000 UTC]
i know what it means, so don't go on telling me i used the theasaurus.
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avelarion [2003-10-15 23:56:07 +0000 UTC]
I don't think your poem is shitty at all. Your descriptions are wonderful and I really get a lot of emotion from the stuff you write. It's amazing..
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