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Valley-of-Fury — 15. Regrets

Published: 2010-10-19 02:22:00 +0000 UTC; Views: 1275; Favourites: 29; Downloads: 32
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EDIT:: added breaks in the monologue. it was too rushed before.

Fury ran as fast as he could into the forest, cursing himself and refusing to stop. He rammed himself into a rock face at the foot of a cliff and then slid into a slosh of mud. He raised himself up and angrily spoke to the air.

"I lost control! How did I lose control!?" Fury shouted as he stomped his hoof into the mud. "I didn't mean to kill him. I didn't want to kill him. I only wanted to scare him off a little. ......But why would I even care. Why should I care what happens to that damn herd! I am not one of them." He paused and thought for a moment before speaking again, in a softer tone, "But I didn't do it for the herd. I did it for selfish reasons. ......I did it because I couldn't bear to see Enigma leave, for her to be taken away like that. I need her." He shook his head, frustrated. "No! Why should I care? I don't love her. She's annoying. A nuisance. I never wanted her company or anyone's company!"

His heart suddenly scorched his body with pain. He winced and groaned from the sting. The agony of his Beloved filled him,

"AGH!! How can I move on when you're still here!? How can I feel anything for ANYONE when all I feel is YOU!?" Fury burst into tears. "How can you be DEAD if your heart is still beating!?"

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OMIGOSH!!!! Finally a new chapter!!! & poor Fury feels very lost and confused.... he's stuck in a hard place and is a bit unstable at the moment...

the background's not all that great.....supposed to be Fury sitting in a pile of mud with a rocky cliff in the background. rocky anything is always hard to do.....not too happy with it......but Fury looks AMAZING!!! (see fury mud-free: [link] )


COMMENTS PLEASE!!!

Chapter 14: [link]
Chapter 16: [link]

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Comments: 21

star43559 [2013-01-07 19:06:04 +0000 UTC]

so sad but nice artwroke

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Seadraz [2010-12-04 08:08:17 +0000 UTC]

Interesting :]

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Dactik [2010-10-20 16:42:36 +0000 UTC]

OMG, amazing! the emotions in his face are so well carried out. and as always, the description is brilliant.

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Valley-of-Fury In reply to Dactik [2010-10-20 17:13:05 +0000 UTC]

Thanks!!

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BrumbyHorseWarrior95 [2010-10-19 22:49:21 +0000 UTC]

so awsome poor fury

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Valley-of-Fury In reply to BrumbyHorseWarrior95 [2010-10-19 22:52:22 +0000 UTC]

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Prettybold [2010-10-19 13:02:02 +0000 UTC]

Amazing, you're getting better!

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Valley-of-Fury In reply to Prettybold [2010-10-19 13:34:03 +0000 UTC]

Thanks!

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Prettybold In reply to Valley-of-Fury [2010-10-19 14:44:20 +0000 UTC]

YW

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Iliveinyourcloset [2010-10-19 11:19:40 +0000 UTC]

Teehee muddy Fury . And Britney is right your expressions are getting better.
ONE COMMENT: In the story section of when Fury is speaking to himself, take pauses to explain how he's saying it and all that cool stuff. Give him a chance to breath in this section .
But I do say, The last little paragraph was GREAT! You coming up with better um. crap what do you call em'...? ANYWAY! You're getting better at those.

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Valley-of-Fury In reply to Iliveinyourcloset [2010-10-19 22:41:16 +0000 UTC]

added to the monologue to break it up.....how is it now?

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Valley-of-Fury In reply to Iliveinyourcloset [2010-10-19 22:29:07 +0000 UTC]

i threw in some pauses "...." its kinda s'posed to feel rushed. (i had a feeling it was too rushed when i wrote it.

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eden-paradox In reply to Valley-of-Fury [2010-10-19 23:12:44 +0000 UTC]

It's a lot better now

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eden-paradox In reply to Iliveinyourcloset [2010-10-19 15:18:31 +0000 UTC]

I agree about the dialogue, he didn't pause much, it made me feel out of breath just reading it

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Valley-of-Fury In reply to eden-paradox [2010-10-19 22:41:27 +0000 UTC]

added to the monologue to break it up.....how is it now?

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Rorelse [2010-10-19 03:39:09 +0000 UTC]

poor poor fury

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eden-paradox [2010-10-19 02:34:54 +0000 UTC]

Fury does look amazing, and so does the mud , I love his expression, you're getting good at those , that must have been such a hard pose to draw

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Valley-of-Fury In reply to eden-paradox [2010-10-19 02:50:08 +0000 UTC]

yes! his expression is my favorite part of the pic! & yes this was a VERY hard pose to draw ...the pose is actually based on a day when i was just really upset and just sketched vent art all day in my classes. this pose was one of the best.

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eden-paradox In reply to Valley-of-Fury [2010-10-19 02:59:08 +0000 UTC]

Awesome, for some reason some of the best artwork is doodled in class

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Valley-of-Fury In reply to eden-paradox [2010-10-19 22:48:10 +0000 UTC]

i'll have to show you all my doodles when i come to see you!

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eden-paradox In reply to Valley-of-Fury [2010-10-19 23:11:33 +0000 UTC]

YES!!! I'm so excited

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